| Title: A Shopping Day for Snape
| 18 Oct 2016 2:21 am
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| Reviewer: ARim (Signed)
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Lovely story.
One flaw:
"..Mr. W., spit your poison," the professor thought PURSing his lips."
not 'piercing' which means stick a needle or pin through them - hard to do while walking and carrying a baby. ouch, poor Severus.
'To purse' means to thin your lips with anger or uncertainty.
If you are uncertain about spelling,
it is better to look it up two or three times in Oxford Dictionaries.
Spellcheck is not reliable.
it was good for a fanfiction about harry being deaged to a baby and snape being his guardian.
Great story, but it annoyed me up the wall that you kept on saying first graders, second graders, etc. THEY ARE YEARS!
There was something else, but I can't remember what it is. Oh, well.
I love the story, and think you're doing great.
As for Harry's age, he was without a doubt 17 months old. no argument. he was born July 31 and his parents were killed October 31 the year he turned 1. July to October is 5 months, therefore, 12+5=17.
:D
| Title: Resting by the lake
| 26 Mar 2011 3:12 am
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| Reviewer: Sirena (Signed)
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Oh! When I was little I used bibi word too, I was calling ladybugs bibi's ;)
| Title: A Potions Accident
| 15 Mar 2011 5:30 pm
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| Reviewer: GriffinRaven (Anonymous)
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Truly a wicked story...I can't wait to find out if its the same/or different to your brilliant story "Babies can Teach a Lot of Lessons".
Hehe, if Mr. Woolfy is a puppet, shouldn't you chase the puppet master instead of the puppet? Anyway, lovely story
Wonderful story! I quite enjoyed it.
| Title: The Ignorant Awakens
| 23 Sep 2009 9:48 am
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| Reviewer: Baghi (Signed)
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OMGosh! That last chap was just too cute! *squeals in delight* Sev's ice heart has melted finally. I loved this story with all my heart :).
| Title: The Ignorant Awakens
| 21 Aug 2009 11:49 am
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| Reviewer: CapeBretonNewfoundlander (Anonymous)
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You have taken me on a roller-coaster ride of emotions. One moment I was laughing until tears came to my eyes and then I was crying.
This is a very well done story and I enjoyed it immensely.
Thank-you
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