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Reviews For Muggleville
Author's Response: Thank you for giving her a chance!
-P.G. Author's Response: Haha, you are right! :) Thank you!
She and Arthur Weasley should meet--they'd really get along, and they could have such fun comparing Muggle artifacts. Looking forward to the next chapter! Author's Response: Oh, what a great idea! Perhaps Hoppity and Arthur Weasley will get together one day and talk Muggle "artifacts".
Author's Response: Thanks, critiques are more than certainly welcome. When I revise this chapter, I will keep your comments in mind! I don't think that Hoppity really thinks about inconsistencies, especially when it's Dumbledore talking. She's not meant to be the brightest crayon in the box.
I adore your OC! And I hardly think of her as a Mary-Sue! I dare say that one cannot be related to Dumbledore and not be both very sweet, well meaning and a little odd. LOL! Lovely hon! Tracy Author's Response: Great! Exactly, she's definitely related to Dumbledore.
"....people would think me of favouritism". I like this story... there are some typos, tho. Do you have a prereader? Having Dumbledore as a relation DOES explain everything. I like Hoppity so far. -K Author's Response: Favouritism is not spelled wrong. I use British spelling. No, I do not use a prereader. Please point out the typos so that I can correct them, however kindly do not point out British/American spelling differences unless I use the American one as I will ignore any British spelling uses pointed out as "mistakes". :)
Oh my...how in the world did I manage to forget a name like Hoppity Clementine Smirkett! LOL!!! I couldn't remember it to save my life, but it is CERTAINLY a memorable name...I loved this line:"Yes, quite. I do feel as if a little decoration on one's robes is ever so nice. If you ever tire of listening to an official you could just watch a star or moon float by." It is so quinetessially Albus...Tehe...Oh, and this! "Really?" Well of course he had known that, but sometimes when he acted as if he was uninformed or senile people tended to supply him with more information.-so true! Great characterization of Albus in this chapter...he's manipulative, but not in an evil way-but he does get what he wants...and Hoppity does NOT come off as a Mary Sue, neither here nor in future chapters-it's as you said-her eccentric behavior can be blamed on her relation to Albus-and she certainly has her flaws...Great chapter-the introduction to your OC was nicely done...and next chapter, I think I have some Severus to look forward to! --Amber Author's Response: Aw, thanks!! :D *dances around* I love reading lines and stuff in reviews becasue I totally forget them and then it's like reading them again for the first time. Thanks!
Author's Response: Yeah thanks for pointing that out about Hoppity. I think that i like her mellower, or that it's too crazy to have her be as crazy as she was at first. XD I'll have to watch it and make sure that she doesn't deviate too much from her roots though. Thanks for your review!
Author's Response: Hehehe... now do you think more of a frog or a rabbit when you hear that name?
Author's Response: Haha, you can be the puncuation Big Sister! Wheeeeeee!!! Lack of hyphens? You are a hyphens supplier. :P No hyphens! Tell me about these run-on sentences. I KNOOOOOWW that I use them, I just don't always figure out how to fix them. |
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