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Reviews For Harry Potter and the Ferratilis Potion
The depicition of the dream was chill-inducing, partially because you go from such a warm, fuzzy scene to one of such horror - it's quite a jolt. The only thing I'd say is that it was better to get Mrs. Weasley out of the way via Ron's injury than the way you were doing it before - by marginalizing her importance to Harry. In canon, Mrs. Weasley is the closest to a mum that Harry has. It was kind of irritating when you made *her* kind of irritating in order to bring Harry closer to Snape. This is better. -K
Aw, that was so sad but so beautiful. Wow. Poor, poor Harry. :*( lovely tenderness in this chapter. I loved the scene with Harry and his parents and the love, it almost made me cry at the end. Wonderful, wonderful job. You need to edit your typos though. It's hurting your story overall. |
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