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Reviews For Harry Potter and the Ferratilis Potion
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Admin Jan: I edited the review to delete the extra letters that were stretching the page out for you.
OMG I Adore this story so much! I spent all day reading it and while I forgot to eat lunch and have an enormous pile of ironing I still need to do, I am so glad. This is amazing, and I want to thank you. This is the first HP fc I've read in almost a year, and you've made me fall in love with Snape all over again. I really really hope you update soon, because I'm actually dying to read more! ~Linds.x
Author's Response: I had to leave it on a cliffhanger. I was feeling the need for reviews. But don't worry, I'm working on the update right now...
OMG How could you have left the story there!! Whats going to happen? This is a great story.
Hi! Okay, the story so far: I really, really liked the pre-Hogwarts parts, and thought that the flow of events was very good. The part with Hagrid and Snape rescuing Harry was cool, as well as the following events with first the deterioration and then the strenghtening of Snape and Harry's relationship. Nape! So cute. All that was excellent. But then once they got to Hogwarts the pacing realllly slowed down and it got more into the conventions of a ton of other fics. Poor Ron, first a Quidditch accident, then he's attacked on a train. You'd really think by the time he went to Diagon Alley his mother would have a platoon of heavily armed guards around him. You started him off like the typical boorish fic Ron (please, so predictable by now, yawn), but then you made him a bit into Big Brother Ron, which was adorable (plus a lot more original). Hermione was incredibly boring. That's because she was the typical Smart n' Sweet fic Hermione. Everything she's involved in will be predictable, since we know she will never, ever be shown in even a remotely bad light. Her role might be one reason why the story slowed down. It didn't add anything different. It would probably be better in terms of pacing and such to focus on things that are specific to this particular story- what makes it original. Oh, and I have to give a shoutout to McGonagall's Mary Poppinesque purse and the toy Quidditch game. Fun details. And the stuffed Hedwig, omg! Author's Response: Thanks for the review, especially all the suggestions. I agree, Hermione is the typical Hermione... I don't really have any special ideas for her. But I don't think I could just neglect her either... she's an important part of Harry's life (the trio afterall). But in any case, rest assured, she's not a huge part of my story... Although she will continue to be by Harry's side. I don't really enjoy when fanfics ignore all of Harry's friends. Yes, I agree they can be somewhat annoying- but they are his friends. Who doesn't have an eclectic collection of annoying friends? Oh and about an earlier comment of yours... how my story changed a bit when they got to school. (Slowing down and more conventions of other fics). When I first started writing my story, I hadn't read any other fanfics than just AYLNO. But over time I started reading a bunch of fanfics (I'm rather addicted to it I'll admitt), so that's probably why all these similarities have showed up. I'm sorry about that, it's not intentional. About the pacing. There's a lot of little details that I'm including, that might not be all that interesting. But, to be honest I really don't want my story to be too fast paced. And I like my little details... maybe once more of the plot gets out they'll hold more meaning? Again thanks for your review! Author's Response: Oh I have to eat my own words. Funny I had forgotten, but a ways down the road in my story (I wonder if I'll ever get there), Hermione will play a rather big part in the story.
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