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Reviews For Ashes of the Phoenix
Good chapter. I like where this is going. Draco helping babysit - could Snape be any meaner? I also like how Snape does things as he talks, but Harry is so preoccupied with what he is saying that he does not notice what Snape is doing. That doubling seems very Slytherin to me, but it's a great way to get things done without people noticing until it's too late. I did notice a few typos and mistakes that broke up the rhythm of the story. I ould be happy to beta read for you if you like and give some indepth feedback. Email me at mybeautifulmane@yahoo.com. Keep up the good work, and post soon!
This`s turning to be very interesting... I always imegined Snape like the person that knows 101 ways to make a potion and 101 ways to make you swallow it. So it was very funny to read those parts ;)
Like this chapter. I think Snape needs to step in and take control before Harry distroys himself. I would like to see longer chapters though. You get us into the story, and then it's over. (pouts). Give us more, give us more! Author's Response: Thank you and dont worry the next chapter is going to be much longer as there is a lot i need to fit in with it.
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