Reviews For Rubbing Alcohol
You did a great job of telling us about what led up to this story without boring us with tons of exposition. I liked how you kept Snape "Snape-like" and yet let hints of compassion creep in.
I'll check out your profile for other stories now. A good handling of the challenge.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your comments! I'm afraid there won't be a sequel, but you can imagine what it was like if you want, and believe that it was what happened. :)
I did wonder, however, why he did not just use magic? He had no potions but surely a wand. How could they be out of sticking charms? Use of spells does not just expire.
I also noticed a lot of commas when periods and semicolons were appropriate. I urge you to restudy proper punctuation .
well done, aside.
Author's Response: Hello. Thank you for the review. In the story the witches and wizards are starving so much that they no longer have enough energy to fuel their magic. That is why they can't use magic. That is why they were going to eat an owl so that they would have energy to do magic.
I studied punctuation several times from University punctuation websites each time I edited and reuploaded this story. It is rather tricky though, mostly because I look at both the British and American versions of commas and they are different, such as I went to the store to buy eggs, bread, and milk versus I went to the store to buy eggs, bread and milk. Both are correct depending on which version (British or American) you use.
Author's Response: Thank youfor your review! I really appreciate it. :)
A few small criticisms:
Naturally, a few small typos, such as "Owlery".
Some of it feels overstated. A subtle mention of certain horrors or difficulties they are facing can be more terrible than laying on the paint with a trowel. Never underestimate the power of suggestion, especially where horror is concerned.
Also, a bit of misused punctuation. E.g. "Did you know that" does not require a comma.
Hope it helps,
Author's Response: Thanks, I will go back and make changes next time I edit. :)
This was really good. I love the setting of a weakening Hogwarts under seige, as it was. VEry interesting, really. It almost made me want to continue, if I were any good at this kind of writing.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! :)
Author's Response: Aw, thank you. It's an answer to a challenge by the same name though. Anyone can respond to it, including you *nudge nudge*. ;)
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