| Title: Chapter Two
| 16 Mar 2022 9:58 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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A lovely scene with Harry opening his present.
| Title: Chapter Two
| 29 Mar 2012 12:06 pm
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| Reviewer: Foreverhope (Anonymous)
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Mmm...stumbling upon this lovely story has inspired me to write tonight. This story flows beautifully! Thank you for the inspiration!
Oh, that was precious. Snape's gotta give in. I know he will. ;-)
| Title: Chapter Two
| 15 Oct 2008 1:45 am
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| Reviewer: Livi (Anonymous)
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I like the line about magic needing chaos. It's true, isn't it? Be careful with your adverbs ending in -ly. In the toy store scene and at the end of this chapter they fall a little awkwardly.
And man, but isn't Dumbledore persuasive? Congrats, comrade
Aww he gave Harry a toy. :) Bout time the kid had something to be happy about. I can see the anger building in Snape or maybe that's just the protectiveness growing in him. Nice Job so far!
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