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Reviews For Mine
Your description of the invisibility cloak makes me think of very fine silk or satin, how it falls through your hands. For something to cause invisibility, being fine and light seems much more realistic than the velvet seen in the movies. "Cat like" is usually written either hyphenated as cat-like or as one word, catlike. Two words is a peculiar way to do it. Toodles!
"It was the most curious feeling. It was like... magic. The way sensation rushed from every point their bodies touched. The way something in the small fragile weight sitting on his hip was reaching into his chest, clutching at his heart, squeezing it. It seemed Harry felt it too, for with a sigh, almost as if the puppet had had his strings cut, he lay his head on his father's shoulder. "Daddy," he murmured, white hot heat of damp breath against the skin of Snape's neck. Arms tightened, that mysterious magic spell shifting through him like blood through veins, like a living thing. Severus breathed in the child's scent and a word pulsed in his brain. Mine." Oh that last part was brilliant. You can almost feel the possessiveness take hold of him before he's even given it another thought its enraptured him. Can't wait to read one.
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