I like how things are coming together too!
Yes, it indeed is coming along splendidly!
Aww, how sweet! This is really good. The only "complaint" I have at all is that I would strongly suggest you do a bit a more in the beginning to emphasize that Snape is *not* already a Professor at Hogwarts.
But besides that, I am thoroughly enjoying this. ;-)
These lines contain the real magic, psychologically: "Another man's seed," Lily mused. "Your seed. James Potter's wife round and full of Severus Snape's child." Her words were soft and despite her promise of no magic there was a kind of thrill to them that ran along Snape's spine and made him quiver.
You have done a terrific job with this story. I like it VERY much.
:) once again, Nice work.
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