Severus is growing by leaps and bounds. So's Harry... lol. A party souns fun.
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Damn, but you still manage to break my heart a little bit more with Harry's innocent comments and actions.
"Where do you get your energy?" "Sausages?" Loved it!
I am really enjoying this. Severus is very much in character, and yet Harry is slowly pulling out the best person Severus can be. And little Harry, so afraid of abandonment, yet strong and full of love too, is endearing.
You write well, the scenes are well crafted, and your skill with language is quite good. One correction: effect is a noun, meaning the result of an action, and you have used it frequently in place of affect, the verb which means to cause an effect.
Overall, this is one of the best young Harry stories I have read.
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