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Reviews For For The Boy Who Has Everything
Your plot continues to be original and imaginiative. That is a particular challenge when one is following the Severitus requirements. You are doing a good job of keeping the main characters IC. I like your Draco. You have set up the change in his personality perfectly. You are also doing a good job of setting up the big reveal. Kudos for your efforts and your success. I hope you continue to enjoy writIng this story because I want to continue to enjoy reading it. Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed the new chapters (it was really just one chapter, but I split it into two because 18,000 words is too much to post as one block). I have a new beta and I've sent her four (short) chapters to look at, so hopefully I'll update again before July is over, and hopefully get even more done next month. My new beta is awesome, she brought in a ton of new ideas for the story. Trying to change any character is pretty hard, especially when they have a very long history of being a particular way, like Draco. He isn't just going to be able to snap his fingers and change everything he believes or his whole outlook on life. He's still a Slytherin and he's still a Malfoy, he's just having to grow and stretch beyond what those things used to mean. But, that's true for every character. Ron is the hardest to write. Right now he's being such an awful little idiot, which is in character for him, but probably makes readers feel like I'm bashing him. Ron either didn't receive or decided to ignore the advice Harry was given, which is to not try to force his friends into making a difficult choice (in this case Ron is the mirror in which Harry can see what will happen if he doesn't make an effort to follow that advice, which of course gives Harry a reason to change himself... I like for everything to be related and to have an effect on everything else). I try to write the characters with the idea that, "change must happen, but changing yourself is the most difficult thing imaginable" (I had a really good quote about this, but I don't know where I wrote it down...), and that seems to work to make them more realistic. Nobody likes to be forced to change something they've invested years into developing, maintaining, or believing. Some characters, like Hermione, don't have to change a whole lot to survive in the new reality, because they haven't invested heavily in the way things used to be. Compare that to someone like Ron, who has whole generations full of investment in the way things used to be, for example the Slytherin-Gryffindor hate, and Draco who has been taught all his life to believe certain things that are no longer going to work to his advantage. They might, like Draco is doing, try out a different way of acting, and then find that it's uncomfortable or doesn't work the way they expect, and then they revert back to their old way of doing things (which, after all, used to work just fine). It's the same for Snape. He invested about 25 years into hating James Potter and eventually James Potter's son. Suddenly what he knows to be reality is turned on its head. Does he just snap his fingers and suddenly he can move forward with ease? Obviously not. By now all of this has become ingrained into his character and become habit, and you don't just make that vanish overnight, even if you really wanted to. People incorporate new reality into their existing personality and character traits, they don't wipe the slate clean every time something major happens in their life. Oops, sorry, this practically turned into an essay, and it wasn't even an answer to anything you asked! LOL Thanks for reviewing!
I'm dying for all these mysteries to be solved! How Snape came to be Harry's father--the circumstances and what's going on with Lupin and what's going on with Draco, and what these Horcruxes are all about. Oh and is Snape the trusted servant and not Wormtail. I'm worried about poor Harry too. I can't wait for the next chapter. I just wish that Snape would interact more with Harry. I wish that Snape would actually be a father to Harry, even if he's not a mushy sort of hands-on father. I wish that Snape didn't have custody of Malfoy too. He seems to be more interested in bonding and in Draco's welfare, than that of his own son. Oh and another mystery I'm dying to figure out--is Lily really Harry's mother, or is Beatrice just a fake name for Lily. Oh, see what you've done with your brilliant story!!! I'm intrigued! Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it! When I started writing, I said I wasn't going to use the horcruxes and hallows at all (because the whole camping trip was plenty in canon... I don't need a repeat in my story). I've changed my mind about using them, but they still won't be very important. Dumbledore destroyed all the horcruxes, so there isn't really anything left for Harry to do about that (other than have a lot of angst, that is). I have four (very short... I might combine them) chapters off at my beta. So more is coming! There will be more interraction between Harry and Snape and/or Hadrian and Snape, More info about Lily (who is definitely Harry's mother).
I am getting so excited. Best last line ever! "His dreams were quite bad enough without adding Snape and his sudden disturbing inclination to treat Harry like Harry really was Hadrian." I am dying for the secret to come out. I just can't wait. Thanks so much for the fast updates too. Hmmm...wonder what Malfoy is up to. Don't trust him. I wonder if all will come to a head at "Hadrian's" brithday party! I can't wait till the next chaper. I agree with Obsidian. This is one of my top favourite Severitus' of all time! Great job!
I wonder what Draco is up to. I have to say though that Harry is really taking to all of this so well, people around him (read Lupin and Snape) need to give him more credit. But then, they are being easier with him so maybe they are at that. I loved this line: "not wanting to give Snape anything else to complain about by sitting on the bed without the bedspread on." Ha, it just seems a very Snape thing to do and eve more so, a very Harry thing to think that Snape would do. These two need some therapy! But, they are making some progress, especially on Harry's side, not giving in to the goading. Good Boy, Harry. And Snape is trying, I'll give him that. I am really ready and looking forward to the big reveal! I am very antsy for it. Your fast updates have been making me extremely happy, I hope you keep them up. This story is my favorite so I'm so excited you have kept with it. Thanks so much for your hard work!
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