Will he be allowed to tho to Hogsmead?
| Title: Chapter 2
| 06 Jan 2011 5:43 pm
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| Reviewer: Kristi (Anonymous)
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Good so far. Looking forward to more. Be careful of spelling errors.
You are using "threw" instead of "through."
"She found out by going threw Muggle records."
Threw is past tense of throw. You are looking for 'through'. You can find the definition of through here...
http://mw4.m-w.com/dictionary/through
HOpe this helps. I like how your fic is going so far, but this error threw me off the reading a bit.
I think this is off to a good start. I really like "Snape's Second Chance" because of the fresh perspective you give things, and this story also looks like it has a lot of potential.
If you are still looking for a beta, I might be able to help. My workload is tremendous right now, but I am a professional translator/proofreader and a former English professor/current language curriculum developer. Let me know. :-)
nice start - update soon please!
| Title: Chapter 2
| 22 Jun 2008 6:42 am
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| Reviewer: Morgan (Anonymous)
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This is an awesome story! It's unique plot is intriguing. I hope you write a whole lot more soon!
| Title: Chapter 2
| 03 Jun 2008 11:00 pm
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| Reviewer: osiris33 (Anonymous)
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hi, i know you like feedback but my writing skills in english are not that good, but i like to know if you'll continiu to write this story
| Title: Chapter 2
| 17 Apr 2008 2:47 am
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| Reviewer: honore11 (Anonymous)
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Dumbles giving up the prophecy so early? Snape being decent and related? Will wonders never cease??? Looking forward to more. Thanks
I just found this story and I really like it.
I have to admit I since book five (until book 7) I kinda thought it was a possibility that Snape and Lily could be cousins or something similiar (it could have made sense). I'm glad someone wrote a story about it.
I can't wait till you update.
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