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Reviews For Hide Yourself Away
Author's Response: Surprise! I know, there had to be some explanation, and I rather liked the photo album idea.
Author's Response: yeah, I really torment the poor kid here, don't I? But it'll turn out right in the end.
Author's Response: Thanks, so glad you liked it!
=^..^= Author's Response: Thank you! I'm honored you would stay up past your bedtime for me! LOL! The sequel follows the book POA a bit more closely, with a few AU additions and characters of my own thrown in for good measure, and I've plans for another one after that too! Enjoy!
I can't believe Dumbledore, though! The wanker says he wants to make nice with Snape, but then he goes behind the man's back to wheedle Harry into returning to Hogwarts. If he were a real person, (and magic were available to me) I'd hex him six ways from Sunday. And then, once more for good luck. :-) Author's Response: yes and so would I. I see Albus as someone who wants to do good, but he sees only the big picture and tends to lose sight of the fact that his players are people with feelings and lives and just because you want to do good--like slay Voldemort--doesn't mean you should manipulate people. The old saying "the road to hell is paved with good intentions" fits him to a T, in my opinion. he wants so much for Harry to be a hero and kill Voldy that he forgets that Harry is just a boy and should not bear such a burden. Good thing in my universe he has Sev to look out for him, huh? Check out the sequel if you want, I followed the books a bit more closely there, but I still added a lot of my own ideas in there.
That seems an odd thing for Harry to think, considering merely stepping outside of his home, alone and *with* his magic, was what started off this story, with him in the hands of the Death Eaters. Author's Response: Yes, but that was back in England, where he was the Boy Who Lived and had enemies, not here in the US where no one knew him and he was just Harry Snape. He doesn't realize there are Muggle predators who search for victims much like the DE. Plus, the neighborhood he's in is known to be a safe one, with hardly any crime.
Since the MacIntyres were Muggles, Severus didn't reveal that he was a wizard to them, they thought he used to be a chemistry professor for a posh English boarding school. I don't understand why he'd lie to them. I mean, if they don't know he's a wizard, how is he able to give their son Advanced Potions lessons? I assume they pay him for his time like any tutor, yes? Or is Neil sneaking out to get lessons? They must know that Harry is a wizard, too, since he plays Quidditch at their house, and was going to go to the Big Game, so why would they bat an eye at Severus being one, too? It doesn't make any logical sense. Lastly, if the MacIntyres have a Floo for talking through, why doesn't Harry use it to get back and forth to their house? That way he wouldn't need to rely on car rides (or Don't See Me --which in canon is actually "Notice Me Not" -- charms) to see his friends. Author's Response: The MacIntyres don't know their children are wizards, they think Severus is giving Neil advanced lessons in another subject and their wizard tutor, who teaches them much like a Hogwarts professor, is just a glorified math, history, and algebra teacher teacher. That's why they only use a Floo for talking and its only the two brothers who use it, plus Severus doesn't want people to know he is a wizard and is keeping a low profile. The MacIntyres don't believe in or accept magic, which is why all the secrecy. As for the Quidditch, the charms work on them as well, and they can't see their sons flying, their eyes slide away.
I'm glad the nightmares have finally showed . . . not that I'm happy he's having them, but glad the emotion is not being repressed anymore. And Harry must have been repressing them fairly deeply to not recall that his magic had been ripped from him -- he didn't remember that happening when he was in the infirmary, after all. Author's Response: Yes, it was an altogether horrific experience, one which his mind acted to block from his conscious memories, and I took some more liberties with TV shows here, and timelines, this is a what if universe, and it's fun to play around with things.
I just found this fic and am enjoying it immensely. I do have a couple of questions/critiques, though, which will hopefully be addressed in the remaining chapters. If not, perhaps you could go back and edit. For one thing, I'm wondering why Harry hasn't had any nightmares of what recently happened to him with the Death Eaters. I recall that canon!Harry had horrific nightmares after what happened in the graveyeard when he was tortured and Cedric was killed. Why no nightmares after the horrific torture he went through in Albania? In fact, he seems to not have spoken or thought of that time at all, except when bemoaning his loss of magic, and the one query about whether the DEs are still after him. The child counselor in me thinks it's unhealthy for him to be repressing that ordeal, and that Snape should be pressuring him to speak of it, if not to him, than to a professional counselor. Elsewise the memories of those days he was tortured will fester and might turn into PTSD. I hope that lack is remedied in later chapters. Another question I had is about the extra year Harry had before Voldie killed Lily and James; How does that work? -- I mean, in canon, Harry learns what happened to his parents mostly by reading about the incident in "Greatest Wizards of the 20th Century" or something, and learns they died in 1981. So, unless everyone in the Wizarding world is in on the lie, there should be some reason for the extra year. I hope that will be explained, too. I know this story (and its sequel) are already completed, but these points really jumped out at me as things that need to be addressed to make for a better story. Again, I love the story, and you have a great way with words and imagery. *off to read next chapter . . .* Author's Response: harry has been repressing those nightmares and they will be coming out soon. Severus knows this but doesn't feel comfortable yet pushing him to reveal them, he hopes they will emerge on their own. They aren't yet at a comfortable stage of their relationship for Harry to reveal all that went on at the DE hands just yet.
As for the extra year difference, that is explained simply by the fact that this is AU and things occurred at a different time and pace than in the original books. I gave Harry an extra year with Lily, Sev, and James because I wanted him to develop more memories of his early years and that is why the time is different. Harry was told several lies as well which accounts for the discrepency.
Author's Response: Really? Well . . .maybe. Thanks for the review. |
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