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Title: Always A Snape 20 Jun 2008 3:22 am
Reviewer: Elfwyn (Anonymous) [Report This]
    A very well written story with few flaws; just a few missing words here and there. The most outstanding thing about it is the characterization and humanity of Harry and Severus as they made their way into a father and son bond. Both were flushed out from the little workup that exists in canon to show complete flawed people. The OCs were intriguing and hopefully will be seen in the sequel.

    The only nitpick plotline flaw I could find was in insisting that Harry was two years old when Lily died in October and yet still maintaining that his birthday was in July. This is a physical impossibility that was never explained. (If Lily still died in October and Harry was two, he would have to have been born in October and that would negate the prophecy altogether.)

    The only other thing was insisting that Harry could fly with the little magic that he had left after stating he was no better than a muggle. Even though in canon squibs cannot fly blooms as the brooms need to react to the magic inherent in a wizards core, and Harry at this point had no core.

    The only true disappointment was not going deeper into Harry's reactions of not having magic, especially after being made to study subjects he could no longer perform which should have at the time appeared to be rubbing salt into a wound. (Yes, even if we all knew he would get his magic back at the point in the story they were talking years.) Think of being a pianist with a crippled hand being forced to continue to study the piano.

    Altogether a good father/son bonding story well worth the read.

    Author's Response:

    Well, the timeline for this fic was altered a bit, Voldemort just challenged the Potters a bit later than canon is all, a year later instead of the usual fifteen months.  I tweaked it that way because I wanted to give Harry and Severus more time with each other when Harry was little to develop a greater bond with each other. 

    As for the broom, the spell that shattered Harry's magic did not work as well as it was intended to, his core was damaged, but it began to mend itself gradually, so Harry can fly a month and a few days afterwards, though that is pretty much all he can do. 

    lastly, Severus wanted Harry to still study his subjects so he wouldn't feel as though he had to abandon the magical world completely and give up being a wizard.  He hoped that Harry's magic would return soon, sooner than predicted, and in order to give the child hope, he told him to do his summer homework, acting as if it were a normal summer, where he would be expected to complete assignments and wouldn't be allowed to use magic.  That is also why Harry didn't really react too much after awhile, for he was used to doing without his magic over the summer, and he was kept occupied with his new family and friends, so the loss didn't hurt quite as bad.

    Thanks for reviewing and hopefully I cleared up those few points.

     

Title: Shattered Magic 17 Jun 2008 9:39 am
Reviewer: Missy Eye (Anonymous) [Report This]
    oh no, oh no, oh no!!!

    Author's Response: Eventually it gets better, just wait!
Title: Rescued 17 Jun 2008 9:37 am
Reviewer: Missy Eye (Anonymous) [Report This]
    OMG omg omg
    that was soo good!!
    On to the next chpter!!! :)

    Author's Response: Thanks and yes, this is a very emotional story
Title: Past Imperfect 02 Jun 2008 8:06 am
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed) [Report This]
    Well-written chapter. I love it when you get to the emotional heart of it all.

    Author's Response: Thank you, I think the emotional parts are one of my strengths, I like to make my readers FEEL things.
Title: Done With It 02 Jun 2008 7:35 am
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed) [Report This]
    Loved it! Glad to keep going!

    Author's Response: Thanks, this was a very tough part to write, since it involved so much anger.
Title: Rescued 02 Jun 2008 7:02 am
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed) [Report This]
    Love it very much, thanks!

    Author's Response: You're welcome and thanks for reviewing!
Title: Safe Haven 24 May 2008 12:18 pm
Reviewer: Reading Nut (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I just found out about stories and i love both series that you have written and will keep reading more.

    Author's Response: Thanks and I hope you will enjoy them!
Title: Always A Snape 11 May 2008 7:06 pm
Reviewer: Persephone Chiara (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Very satisfying story. Well written, beautifully spun tale and very lively. So why only 9 out of 10? Don't be mad but I oppose Corporal Punishment and nothing will ever make me think otherwise. No one, parent or stranger, has the right to hurt a defenseless child. There are more effective ways of discipline. Lemme put it this way: Violence, no matter how "lovingly" applied, is never right. We live in a society that winces at men hitting adult women (And justly so), yet spanking and intimidating defenseless children is still acceptable. To me that's hypocrisy.

    Don't worry though, I'll not bring that up when reviewing your other stories. Just wanted to make myself understood. I LOVE your writing VERY MUCH and please NEVER stop writing!^^

    Author's Response: Thank you and I myself grew up w/it but don't use it at all, however this is a fictionalized story, and so Sev does use it but only sparingly, he is not an abuser like his father.  Glad you enjoyed this!
Title: Always A Snape 29 Apr 2008 7:12 am
Reviewer: Fairiegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    sequel.....hmmm well duh....i wanna see lil mia grow up....but i think you already have a sequel to this one...hmmm ill go and check...

    Author's Response: Yes, I do now, but when I wrote that I didn't! So thanks for reading and hope you enjoy the next one!
Title: Always A Snape 15 Apr 2008 6:21 am
Reviewer: Harriverse (Anonymous) [Report This]
    All that was a plot by Dumbledore???? Why isn't his office green?

    Author's Response: Maybe it should be . . .the old man is more than what he seems!

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