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Reviews For Hide Yourself Away
The only nitpick plotline flaw I could find was in insisting that Harry was two years old when Lily died in October and yet still maintaining that his birthday was in July. This is a physical impossibility that was never explained. (If Lily still died in October and Harry was two, he would have to have been born in October and that would negate the prophecy altogether.) The only other thing was insisting that Harry could fly with the little magic that he had left after stating he was no better than a muggle. Even though in canon squibs cannot fly blooms as the brooms need to react to the magic inherent in a wizards core, and Harry at this point had no core. The only true disappointment was not going deeper into Harry's reactions of not having magic, especially after being made to study subjects he could no longer perform which should have at the time appeared to be rubbing salt into a wound. (Yes, even if we all knew he would get his magic back at the point in the story they were talking years.) Think of being a pianist with a crippled hand being forced to continue to study the piano. Altogether a good father/son bonding story well worth the read. Author's Response: Well, the timeline for this fic was altered a bit, Voldemort just challenged the Potters a bit later than canon is all, a year later instead of the usual fifteen months. I tweaked it that way because I wanted to give Harry and Severus more time with each other when Harry was little to develop a greater bond with each other. As for the broom, the spell that shattered Harry's magic did not work as well as it was intended to, his core was damaged, but it began to mend itself gradually, so Harry can fly a month and a few days afterwards, though that is pretty much all he can do. lastly, Severus wanted Harry to still study his subjects so he wouldn't feel as though he had to abandon the magical world completely and give up being a wizard. He hoped that Harry's magic would return soon, sooner than predicted, and in order to give the child hope, he told him to do his summer homework, acting as if it were a normal summer, where he would be expected to complete assignments and wouldn't be allowed to use magic. That is also why Harry didn't really react too much after awhile, for he was used to doing without his magic over the summer, and he was kept occupied with his new family and friends, so the loss didn't hurt quite as bad. Thanks for reviewing and hopefully I cleared up those few points.
Author's Response: Eventually it gets better, just wait!
that was soo good!! On to the next chpter!!! :) Author's Response: Thanks and yes, this is a very emotional story
Author's Response: Thank you, I think the emotional parts are one of my strengths, I like to make my readers FEEL things.
Author's Response: Thanks, this was a very tough part to write, since it involved so much anger.
Author's Response: You're welcome and thanks for reviewing!
Author's Response: Thanks and I hope you will enjoy them!
Don't worry though, I'll not bring that up when reviewing your other stories. Just wanted to make myself understood. I LOVE your writing VERY MUCH and please NEVER stop writing!^^ Author's Response: Thank you and I myself grew up w/it but don't use it at all, however this is a fictionalized story, and so Sev does use it but only sparingly, he is not an abuser like his father. Glad you enjoyed this!
Author's Response: Yes, I do now, but when I wrote that I didn't! So thanks for reading and hope you enjoy the next one!
Author's Response: Maybe it should be . . .the old man is more than what he seems! |
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