Honestly, the minute you made his hair long as crap and greasy, I knew Snape was gonna be his dad.
I like Harry. I can already tell that's he's a manipulative little sass-bag.
This is an amazing story, I love Harry's cockney accent.
Ahw, how kind of snape. And Malfoy is a git
I think the chapter was a bit rushed. There should be more description to his surroundings and feeling, because without them it's harder for the reader to get into the story. It made everything seem so unrealistic since Harry seemed to take everything he was hearing so easily.
Also, the part with the guy using kids to steal for him reminded my of an episode of Batman: The Animated Series. :)
Oh, I almost cried over poor Hedwig!
Interesting concept! Can't wait to read more!
Title: The Sorcerer’s Stone
| 12 Jan 2011 3:37 am
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Reviewer: Kristi (Anonymous)
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Good story. I'm not sure how I feel about Niamh. She seems like a slice of Hermione placed in Slytherin just so Harry would have a friend. I noticed that you made up some Slytherins in Harry's year instead of keeping real Slytherins such as Tracey Davis and Theodore Nott. I like Jardin. Will Harry get rid of that accent after being around his friends for the next few years? I can't wait until Harry finds out that he is Snape's son.
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