| Title: Chapter 1
| 02 Jul 2014 1:05 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Gosh, Harry, bleeding nose isn't funny!
Good job.
| Title: Chapter 1
| 25 Jun 2013 12:33 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you a lovely little scene
| Title: Chapter 1
| 14 May 2010 12:33 am
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Cute story! There's one confusing moment at the beginning, however.
In the first sentence, as Sev enters, "his ward Harry Potter" is right behind him. In the fourth sentence, "Completely forgetting to retrieve his ward from his inside pocket" makes one wonder if he'd shrunk Harry and pocketed him! Reading farther, one realizes you meant "...retrieve his WAND". Quick correction, but I thought you should know!
Nice little story!
Author's Response: Glad you like that story. Thanks once again for point out the typos. I think I spent less than an hour working on this story and Beta seemed to think it was fine before we posted it... I not. I really need to work on catching typos like that. Thanks again!
Awww adorable! Haha short and sweet- I like it!
Lol, Harry was cute! Severus smirked--and it was not mean! Wow, thanks for writing this!
| Title: Chapter 1
| 18 May 2008 5:46 pm
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| Reviewer: wolfawaken (Anonymous)
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