Reviews For Hard To Be Humble
Author's Response: Lol, Lockhart was asking for it, ^_- Glad you enjoyed!
I can't seem to stop laughing. This is a wonderful story! I love Snape's embaressment that Lockhart had snitched his wand. Then he just up and punches him. Perfect! Ron's character was spot on, too. I'm curious if he ever tried to blackmail Snape...
Thanks for a wonderful read!
Author's Response: You're quite welcome! ^_^ Thanks so much for reviewing, I'm really glad you liked it!
Author's Response: ^_^ Thank you! I'm very glad you liked it!
Author's Response: He had to act quick--no time to run off to find a teacher...or maybe he wanted to play hero for once without any help. Thank so much for reviewing!
Author's Response: Lol, thanks. :)
A few criticisms:
You should probably read it over two or three times before you post. There are a number of grammatical mistakes, as well as a few typos I'm sure you would have caught.
Some of the dialogue and accompanying actions/expressions seem a bit forced; there are points when the characters' don't sound completely natural (mostly occurring in the second half of the story).
Also, cut some of the adverbs. Yes, Rowling had the same problem, but because your story is very short, it is more noticeable. Many of the adverbs don't add any value to the story; well-written voice and action require no additional description.
I hope this helps! Thank you for your own prolific reviews; it means a lot.
Thank you for your constructive criticism, It is welcomed. I will go back and read over the story. It was written rather quickly, I'm afraid I was rather fast with proofreading. Thank you for your review!
Author's Response: Thank you so much Snapegirl! Glad you enjoyed and thanks for your response!
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