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Reviews For Hard To Be Humble
Author's Response: Lol, thanks. :)
A few criticisms: You should probably read it over two or three times before you post. There are a number of grammatical mistakes, as well as a few typos I'm sure you would have caught. Some of the dialogue and accompanying actions/expressions seem a bit forced; there are points when the characters' don't sound completely natural (mostly occurring in the second half of the story). Also, cut some of the adverbs. Yes, Rowling had the same problem, but because your story is very short, it is more noticeable. Many of the adverbs don't add any value to the story; well-written voice and action require no additional description. I hope this helps! Thank you for your own prolific reviews; it means a lot. Pax vobiscum, Aethyr Author's Response: Thank you for your constructive criticism, It is welcomed. I will go back and read over the story. It was written rather quickly, I'm afraid I was rather fast with proofreading. Thank you for your review! Scorpia
Author's Response: Thank you so much Snapegirl! Glad you enjoyed and thanks for your response!
Your Melfis. Author's Response: If I can think of more oneshots involving those characters, I will probably write them, :) Thank you for your response!
Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, I thought the song was perfect, if only it was not a country song. That part was kind of hard imagining, Lockhart does not seem the kind to sing country, lol. Thank you for reviewing.
Author's Response: Thank you, kepping him in character was hard with the sitouation he had to deal with, lol. Thank you for reviewing!
The best part was Sev punching him! Author's Response: I enjoyed reading about Lockhart in the books, he's different from all the others. And he's so funny...even if he does not mean to be so, lol. Thank you for reviewing!
Funny short-story, I had loads of fun reading it :). Poor Ron and Snape definitely suffered through that experience. P.S. I totally cheered Snape on when he punched Lockhart out! :D Author's Response: Thank you, I thought it was Lockhart as well, lol. Yes, Snape slugging Lockhart was great, hehe. If only it had happened in the books, sigh. Thank you for reviewing Beth!
Author's Response: It's a funny song. Thanks for reviewing!
Author's Response: Thjank you bunches Alexis! |
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