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Reviews For Harry Potter and His Three Godfathers
Author's Response: Not really but I don't think Ron and Harry will be friends. Not sure yet.
Couldn't big Harry have told the adults about the Longbottoms being targeted? It would have saved Neville, Alice and Frank a lot of pain and hardship. If there wasn't time to tell them couldn't he at least have written something down about it? I really enjoy this story and I hope you update soon. Finding out what house Harry's sorted into is what I'm looking forward to the most. Siruis will freak if Harry becomes a Slytherin. And some how I don't think that Severus will be over joyed if he becomes a Gryffindor. Please update soon!!!!!!!!!!!
Ron definitely has a problem with jealousy, hopefully he'll get over it. Glad poor Harry is okay. But now comes the dreaded Terrible Twos. Will we see a temper tantrum throwing Harry soon?
However, I think this chapter could use some work. The problem is that many of the characters are indifferent to the situation at hand. For instance, you say that Snape is "curious" about the young man who is suddenly there. However, you haven't taken into consideration that Snape has just lost Lily--would he really be up for talking at this point? Would he really be so agreeable? Also, none of the characters really seem shocked that Harry is in the future and I think they would be. Another way to make it better would be to get a beta reader. There are a few typos and mistakes that could easily be corrected with a beta. I'm not saying this to discourage you though. I just really like the idea of this story and I think these things would make it a lot better. -P.G.
I love it when Harry is sick and all he wants is Severus, aww! I'd want Sev too if I was sick. :D Ron is in serious trouble, but I've seen 2 year old's when I taught preschool behave that way, very possessive and jealous and violent sometimes. One of them threw a Tonka truck at another's face, and thank God the kid didn't need stitches. I'm sure Ron will get a spanking at the very least from either Molly or Arthur and have learned his lesson. The part where Harry wakes up with all three godfathers around his bed reminded me of a Full House Episode where Danny, Joey, & Jesse all sing Michelle to sleep to the tune of Goodnight Sweetheart. So cute! Author's Response: Harry definately prefers Sev when he is no feeling well, but then again who wouldn't. *winks* Ron's behaviour was based on a child in one of the preschools I taught at. The child was very possessive of his older sibling to the point he would hurt anyone who dared play with the sibling. I am sure Arthur would be the one administering a spanking to Ron since Molly was too angry to handle it calmly and safely. Thats where I got that idea from. lol Thanx I couldn't remember where the idea came from but I loved the fact that they would be there when he wakes up on his birthday to make it seem a very special day. Thank you for reading and reviewing my story. :)
Hope that you're feeling better, and I hope that you update soon! Nice chapter, and I love little Harry! Author's Response: Yes Ron was very naughty and may continue to be naughty too but I am not sure at this time. Thank you I am starting to feel better so can concentrate on the next chapter. ;) Thank you for reading and reviewing my story.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing my story. It will definately be a birthday to remember thats for sure. Yes what Ron did was horrible and I am sure Arthur punished him accordingly. You would think so but I think his jealousy gets the better of him.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing my story. I will update as soon as i can. |
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