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Title: Chapter Four - Meanwhile Back At The Office 03 Aug 2008 3:46 pm
Reviewer: rosworms (Signed) [Report This]
    Hmm... good story idea. But you keep switching from past tense to present tense and it's awfully jarring.

    for example...

    -----"Moony you would really do that to me?" asked Sirius with a hurt expression on his face.

    "For Harry’s well being yes I would old friend. I would do anything to make Harry’s childhood much better than what I saw in those memories, even helping to raise Harry without you." Remus replied pointing to the pensieve.-----

    See... in this one Sirius ASKED and Remus REPLIED... both past tense.

    Then...

    -----Severus looks from Sirius’ outstretched hand up to the man’s face then over to Harry before he takes Sirius’ hand. "I will also do my best to put the past behind me where it belongs for little Harry’s sake." Severus confirms. -----

    And now Severus LOOKS and CONFIRMS in present tense....

    Author's Response: Thank you for pointing thaat out to me..........I had thought I caught them all but guess I missed a few.  I hope  you enjoyed the story even with my confusing the past with the present.
Title: Chapter Four - Meanwhile Back At The Office 03 Aug 2008 10:57 am
Reviewer: crazychick84 (Signed) [Report This]
    OMG whats wrong with harry?! has he been out o his own timeline too long? i hope you can update soon!

    Author's Response: You will get your answer in the next chapter.  *evil grin*
Title: Chapter Four - Meanwhile Back At The Office 03 Aug 2008 9:37 am
Reviewer: dracosgoddess123 (Signed) [Report This]
    argh what happened!!! is he being sent back now??? plz update soon. i hate cliffys

    Author's Response:

    You will find out in the next chapter.  I will try to update soon. 

    The Devil made me leave it there.   *giggles*

Title: Chapter Three - Saving Sirius From The Big Bad Rat 30 Jul 2008 3:31 pm
Reviewer: Syret (Signed) [Report This]
    GREAT!!! GREAT!!! GREAT!!!
Title: Chapter One - Changing The Future 29 Jul 2008 3:28 pm
Reviewer: Syret (Signed) [Report This]
    Love your story

    Author's Response: Thank you.
Title: Chapter Three - Saving Sirius From The Big Bad Rat 26 Jul 2008 6:34 am
Reviewer: ReginaCaeli (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Lovely chapter,thanks for the update.I can hardly wait to see Sirius' reaction to 17 year old Harry.

    Author's Response: Thank you and i will be updating soon.
Title: Chapter Three - Saving Sirius From The Big Bad Rat 26 Jul 2008 1:13 am
Reviewer: graynavarre (Signed) [Report This]
    I am glad they caught the rat.

    Did you mean to go out of canon? I remember in the first book that Sirius arrived at the Potter's home just as Hagdrid got there. Hagdrid had Harry and Sirius wanted the baby. But Dumbledore had told H to bring the baby to him.

    It is okay though. Looking forward to Sirius finding that he and Remus and Severus will be raising little Harry

    Author's Response: Yes I did mean to go off canon.  I guess I should have put that at the beginning of my story.  I apologize for not doing so.  In my story Sirius was on assignment until after Harry had been delivered to Dumbledore by Hagrid.  When he heard that James and Lily were killed by Voldemort he assumed that little Harry was dead too and that is why he went after Pettigrew because he wanted revenge.  There will definately be fireworks, but not telling anymore than that.  ;)  Thank you for reading and please keep reading.
Title: Chapter Three - Saving Sirius From The Big Bad Rat 25 Jul 2008 8:15 pm
Reviewer: boycrazy30008 (Signed) [Report This]
    i love this chapter!!! Update soon

    Author's Response: Thank you
Title: Chapter Three - Saving Sirius From The Big Bad Rat 25 Jul 2008 3:05 pm
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    That was great and I loved the Keystone Cop reference! And I'm glad Remus stuck up for Sev and told Sirius to grow up, he really does need to! Can't wait to see the reaction Sirius has to the fact that now he has to share guardianship with Remus and Severus. It should be a good one! Update soon, OK?

    Author's Response: Thank you.  I loved the old Keystone Cop movies so I used it when describing the scene.  Yes it seems Remus has grown up and is ready to help Severus raise Harry.  He realizes that to raise little Harry they are going to have to put their differences behind them but I am sure it is gonna take Sirius a little while to realize that but he gets an eye opening next chapter. 
Title: Chapter Three - Saving Sirius From The Big Bad Rat 25 Jul 2008 11:13 am
Reviewer: crazychick84 (Signed) [Report This]
    should be a bit of a shock for sirius to get to hogwarts and see a 17 year old harry! great chapter

    Author's Response: Thank you and it will be quite a shock when Sirius get to Hogwarts.

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