| Title: Unforeseen Savior
| 13 Oct 2013 3:27 am
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| Reviewer: Gillian (Anonymous)
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omg please make this into a a longer story and not just a oneshot please :))
you are so talented
Points for Snape! (And the writer of course!)
Good story. I liked your use of their thoughts in it. It gave us a good view into Snape's mind. Plus, I liked the fact that he held Harry and is actually making the effort to make sure Harry gets better. Though, it does seem like you ended it rather abruptly.
*blinks*
Now, I wanna read more of it. I mean, all the questions this evokes: *How* did Snape come to care about Harry? When? What will they tell everyone else about Harry staying in Snape's quarters? Will Harry tell his friends? How will they react? Did they even notice that he was so depressed? and if not, *why* not?
That said... Nicely done! I like it. ^^
Oh wow, poor Harry. I'm glad that Snape has saved him from himself and his pain.
sounds more like the of a start to a good story than a one shot... (hint hint) lol
Author's Response: Unfortunately, I am already writing one fic that is going to take a very long time to complete (it is going to be a rather long series), so I am not planning on making this into a story rather than a one-shot. I just haven't got the time, especially as I'm already behind in my writing for my other story and this was only planned to be a one-shot, not a chaptered story. Maybe someday I will make it into a story but not anytime soon and I'm not guaranteeing anything. Thank you a lot for the review though! :)
Ahh. How sweet. Snape is OOC of course, but it is fanfiction after all. It would have been nice if it had been a bit longer. Or there had been more discussion. I would have thought Snape would have summoned Dumbledore or someone immediately. Also, You never mentioned him mending the cut. I enjoyed reading it! (:
Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the review! I know I have quite a few errors in this and have a lot of things to add and take out... I'm planning on editing this and re-posting it in a few weeks. And I can't believe I didn't mention him mending the cut... *sigh* I thought I had. I suppose that'll teach me to re-read my fanfics more than once before posting them. Thanks a lot for pointing that out!
| Title: Unforeseen Savior
| 17 Jul 2008 8:20 am
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| Reviewer: GoLd (Signed)
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Good idea!
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
| Title: Unforeseen Savior
| 16 Jul 2008 5:25 pm
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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Good job. Maybe just break up the two points of view-they kind of ran into each other. Nice story.
Author's Response: Yes, I did notice that about the points of view. Unfortunately, Microsoft Word automatically replaced my dividers with their own, which rarely show up when fics are uploaded. I am going to try to correct this when I get a chance, which probably won't be for a while (sadly). Thanks a lot for the review! :)
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