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Title: Snape's Secrets 04 Nov 2006 8:20 am
Reviewer: Flyzonked (Anonymous) [Report This]

    I really liked the bit where Harry and Ron where eavesdropping on Dumbledore and Snape. You write very much like JKRowling, I like the mystery of Snape playing out, and you have all the characters written perfectly! Especially the twins :-)

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Title: Snape's Secrets 01 Feb 2005 12:38 pm
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    I loved the comparison to Dumble's speech with a talk show. ("Of course, the only way we can know for sure is to have a Death Eater or Voldemort - " There was a general flinch throughout the room " - attack Harry." "Before anybody suggests," said Snape, darkly, "no.") hehehehe... ("I'm putting all the Weasley children on Harry Potter Protection Duty," he said.) Wheee!!! great fun! The part with the glasses and the Snape mystery is really a nice touch to the story. Harry seems a little too caring though. I think that they need a few more degrees of antagonism to make the story better, even though it's wonderful this is just a tiny thing that could make it better. :).

    You missed a traveling description after the glasses fell on Snape to whereever they went to have cocoa. I had no idea where they were, in fact I was a little caught off guard with Hermione and Lupin's conversation and Tonk's face changing, thinking that they were doing these things as they walked.

    Your Dumbledore is really bossy in this chapter. It's an interesting side of him that we don't really see in the books so much. The first time I read this story I followed and felt Harry and Ron's questions better but now that I know why Snape's having bad luck and such it's so much easier to follow and understand the Snape and Dumbledore conversation. Haha the Harry and Ron questions seem a little childish now. I loved the end of this chapter when Snape looked at Harry and Harry turned his face before Snape could get into his thoughts.

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