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Reviews For Harry Potter and the Phoenix's Flight
I really liked the bit where Harry and Ron where eavesdropping on Dumbledore and Snape. You write very much like JKRowling, I like the mystery of Snape playing out, and you have all the characters written perfectly! Especially the twins :-) x
You missed a traveling description after the glasses fell on Snape to whereever they went to have cocoa. I had no idea where they were, in fact I was a little caught off guard with Hermione and Lupin's conversation and Tonk's face changing, thinking that they were doing these things as they walked. Your Dumbledore is really bossy in this chapter. It's an interesting side of him that we don't really see in the books so much. The first time I read this story I followed and felt Harry and Ron's questions better but now that I know why Snape's having bad luck and such it's so much easier to follow and understand the Snape and Dumbledore conversation. Haha the Harry and Ron questions seem a little childish now. I loved the end of this chapter when Snape looked at Harry and Harry turned his face before Snape could get into his thoughts. |
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