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Reviews For Harry Potter and the Phoenix's Flight
The second is the fact that you have Ron and Harry not present when each of them dress... this shows not only your gender but also your age. Even JKR has them dressing in the same room! Boys are not near as modest when it comes to 'nakedness' as girls are. When you gain a few years of experience you'll realize this! The first time it was amusing, now it just makes me want to pat you on the head and tell you things will change when you grow up and spend time with a man. But over all the story, thus far, is good but with a few minor changes it could be great! ~Louisa |
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