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Title: Chapter 7: The Suffering of Albus 27 Aug 2009 7:28 am
Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]
    Hey PG. I must have missed the alert for this. Hence the late review.

    Wonderful chapter. Severus is brilliant in this story. You paint him perfectly. Irascible and superior, just like in canon. And a brilliant wizard to boot.

    It's great to see HArry up and about, even if it was only temporary, before he was knocked on his butt. Probably a good thing. I can't imagine his panic, thinking he might be about to lose his only remaining child.

    Great to see Hermione. Why is it so long between visits though? And why hasn't she seen HArry for so long? Surely even the MoM deserves to have alife and Hermione does have a rather large family. I can't imagine Hermione not having frequent contact with those she loves, though I can understand why she would give Ron a wide birth being as bad-tempered and horrible as he is. So, Ron blames Harry for a raid going wrong, does he? Poor Harry...and he would feel guilty and think it was entirely his fault.

    So, Lily stopped by. Is a reconciliation in the wind. Onto the final chapter to find out.

    I think this story benefits enormously from being written in the first person, entirely from Als POV. Do you find writing in the first person difficult? I know when I write personal introspection in the first person I have to double check to make sure I haven't written 'he' rather than 'I' I find it quite difficult to keep on track, though I suppose if the whole thing is written in the first person, it is easier.

    Okay...onwards.

    Lesley~

    Author's Response:

    Hey Lesley, thanks for the reading!

    I'm so glad you like my Severus--I was hoping he would sound very much like the canon version, while still fitting the profile of a mentor to Harry and Albus.

    I really wanted Harry to be turned in the right direction by Severus' advice, but I knew at the same time that he couldn't just wake up the next day and be back to normal either.  Hearing that Albus was in an accident would really affect Harry on many levels and I imagine was in need of an extra large dose of Calming Draught.  Albus is all he has left at that point and Harry loves him dearly--I'm glad you caught that part.  

    As for Hermione, she is avoiding Ron.  Ron is being a total a-hole and since Hermione has very little time off her job, she doesn't always want to spend it getting yelled at by Ron.  I should have put something in the epilogue about him too because it's quite possible that Ron will never come around, especially if his injury is permanent.  Anyway, Ron has a whole slew of family members who take turns visiting him, so it's not as if he's lonely out there.  

    I think Hermione would like to visit Harry more, but I think she'd also have a bit of a problem seeing him in his current situation.  Clearly, Harry is not the wizard he once was and I think that would be hard for Ron and Hermione to come to terms with before the accident.  After the accident, Harry takes time off his Auror job and only gets worse because he has nothing to occupy his mind besides thoughts of his misfortune.  Because of this, I think Hermione would spend most of her free time with her own grown up children and grandchildren; she needs a little light in her life too and her current job must be extremely stressful.

    I'm very glad I went with Al's p.o.v. in this story.  When I started to write it, I actually redid the first chapter several times, putting it in third person and also trying to write it from Harry's p.o.v.  Albus' was more satisfying though and his emotions run so deep that they really add to the fic.

    It is hard to write it though.  Sometimes I get on a roll, look back, and find that I randomly switched back to third person a few paragraphs back, lol.  It's a challenge (and then, I also have a hard time going back to third person after writing first person for a long time--it's a vicious cycle!) but I really like the perspective.  It's fun because you get to try and convey what other people are thinking while only speaking through the one person.  That person can also misinterpret things and that's just a lot of fun to write.  I plan to write more first person fics because the perspective has really grown on me.

    Thanks again for reading--your comments have been a great help to this fic and to me as an author.

    -P.G. 

Title: Chapter 7: The Suffering of Albus 17 Aug 2009 2:04 am
Reviewer: tabbycat (Signed) [Report This]
    Ooh! Brilliant! Love Hermione. Completely brilliant idea for her to be minister. How can there be only one more chapter?!

    Author's Response:

    Thanks Tabby, I'm glad you enjoyed it!  I'm glad you liked my Hermione.  As for one more chapter, well, originally this was for Challenge Fest, but I just didn't get it done on time.  I never meant for it to get this long, though I realize now that it really could have been way longer than I made it.  Don't worry though, I'm going to cover all of the loose ends in the Epilogue.

    Thanks for supporting my writing!

    -P.G. 

Title: Chapter 7: The Suffering of Albus 13 Aug 2009 7:47 pm
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Yay, I'm so happy to see you updated this. I was wondering what had happened to Albus and all of them. I'm glad that Severus left, even though he chose a most unconventional way to do it. He was right, no one should have to die shut up in a hospital and he was warrior enough to want to go down fighting.

    I was worried for Albus there for a while, afraid he might have broken his back, my girlfriend's husband who was a fireman broke his that way when a ceiling fell on him. But it looks like Al will be okay and Viv and he have finally got it together.

    I hope the rest of the Potters and Weasleys can get it together and learn how to forgive each other, because life is too short to hold grudges for a past that is done and over with.

    Great story! Can't wait to see the climax and I've just updated 2 Hawks.

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for reading!  Poor Severus, you know, he just didn't belong there and he knew it.  As for his unconventional method, it was more directed at giving Albus the advice he needed about Viv--he could have escaped in a different way, but he wanted to make a point to Albus and he succeeded.

    I'm so sorry to hear about your friend's husband; that sounds horrible.  Oh goodness, the story really would have lived up to it's name if I did that.  I wanted Al to have a little happiness though and I couldn't leave him and Vivian unresolved like that.  

    I can't say anything about the Potters and Weasley's just yet, other than that it will be addressed in the last chapter.  Really, it is past time for them to let go of their grudges, the 5+ year ones.  Do stay tuned--if I ever get it written, I think you'll enjoy the epilogue.  Thanks again for your support!

    -P.G. 

Title: Chapter 7: The Suffering of Albus 13 Aug 2009 7:18 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh God! That was so beautiful. I've got tears in the corners of my eyes. I'm so glad that Vivian and Albus are together. Vivian was my mother's name, so I'm partial to it!

    I hope that Ron and Lily make up with Harry too.

    Oh, and I love how Snape escaped. A true Slytherin till the end. Too cute. I guess I was kind of hoping that he really wouldn't die, but I still love how he is still a very powerful wizard.

    So glad that you've updated, and I can't wait for the epilogue.

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for the lovely compliments--I couldn't leave Albus and Viv at odds with each other.  I'm a sucker for romance, so I'm really glad you enjoyed that part.  I'm also glad you liked Snape's little ending; it was my favorite part to write and I think he would have done what he needed to do to be happy at the end.  And hey, Dumbledore was extremely powerful until his end, so I wanted to paint Severus the same way.  I really appreciate you coming to read, despite the huge breaks in between my chapters.  Your support is very encouraging--thank you again for reading!

    -P.G. 


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