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Reviews For Making Things Even
Author's Response: Thanks!
Author's Response: Thank you!
The ending was a bit rushed IMHO, but I do like the results :) If Sirius ever found out that Snape was responsible for getting him out of Azkaban and reclaiming his godson; he’d likely pass out. Mark did wonderful in repaying Harry, and in the best way too. Author's Response: All my writing is rushed these days. It's a hurry-before-the-baby-wakes-up kind of thing. We take care of my eleven month old niece (light of my life, apple of my eye...) as a contribution to my brother's education while his sweet wife is working to put him through school. Mom would be happy to give me writing time while she plays with her, but Evie won't allow it. I'm supposed to be paying attention to her, not some stupid old computer!
Author's Response: Nope, no sequel. I'd rather write Harry than a random OC. Since we never actually met Mark Evans in canon, that's what he really is--a canonically named OC.
Author's Response: Actually, Tabitha went over it for me. My long-time beta got bitten by the monster known as RL and I haven't heard from her in over a year. She was my Brit-picker, too. *pout* I went into it and corrected a few little errors. Remmeber, for once I didn't actually post it...
Author's Response: Thank you! Seems to be that a good many Slytherins would prefer some things be behind the scenes...
Just one question - what year did it happen? Clever, clever Slytherins!!!! Author's Response: Fifth year. That was the fifth year sorting song, BTW
Your concept was good and your description of Little Whinging. Loved the perspective and the fact that you gave Mark a voice and characterization of his own; would have liked a bit more on how he adapted to Slytherin; surely all Slytherins aren't biased? I must say, though, I really didn't like the concluding paragraph. I found it odd and a bit inconcievable that just by looking at those headlines Mark knows the impact he's made. How would he know what Snape did? Why would Snape trust an eleven year old with that information if he didn't even tell the mutt? Sorry, just find that a bit hard to believe. Author's Response: Snape didn't tell Mark anything. Why would he?
I love how sneaky Severus was in orchestrating Sirius' release, and thus paving the way for Harry to be freed. Sneaky Slytherin. I also like how you have portrayed Mark as well. I guess he DID make a good Slytherin. Nicely done. Author's Response: Thank you! I admit that there wasn't any real time interaction between Sev and Harry, but this was primarily Mark's story, as specified in the challenge... |
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