| Title: Chapter 15: Crime and Punishment
| 10 Aug 2009 7:55 pm
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| Reviewer: amainage (Signed)
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miracles do happen lol Dudders in a corner, Vernon cleaning, Petunia cooking for Harry. Alert the authorities! lol nice chap.
Author's Response: HAHA! Yeah, the authorities are on their way! Thanks, again, for the review!
I do feel badly for Petunia because in one of your flashbacks, she said she knew what it was like to be married to someone you don't love. What if Petunia let the abuse go on because she was afraid of being abused herself by Vernon? I hope Snape realizes sooner or later that she really does mean well, even if she has made some mistakes.
-P.G.
Author's Response: You must have read ahead! lol. No, I'm glad you're a thinker! Thanks again for the review!!
another awesome chapter as always, thank you for the updates and by the way yes i am in Slythein, so thanks for the points :)
Author's Response: No problem. Always happy to helpout other Slytherin! And thanks for the review!!
| Title: Chapter 15: Crime and Punishment
| 07 Aug 2009 7:58 am
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| Reviewer: Elfwyn (Anonymous)
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I like this so far, however this chapter here does seem very similar to Faking It by abee_0587 on HPfandom site with a few differences such as Snape is sent to live with Harry at number 4 willingly and then enacts the revenge/punishment and is slash. Just thought you would want to know...if the idea came from abee maybe a credit would be nice or if its coincidence well those do happen, especially with all the fics out there.
Author's Response: oh wow, thanks for tell me. No, actually, I've never read that story at all. Never a big fan of slash, so I'm certain I've never read it. I feel a little bit bad though about it, but I would have it known that I was making this story up on my own. Maybe I should just announce that in the next chapter? It's just a weird coincidence I suppose, but I do feel bad about it. Thanks for the review though, and I'm glad you like it.
Nice descripton on how Vernon sounds when he complains about Snape breaking his nose. It was nice and vivid. HAHA! He "disconnected" the telephone! That is so funny... Oh, oh dear. He made Vernon quit his job. Oh dear. How would the Dursleys maintain the house bills, now? Harry stopped almost saying Snape mentally after he gave the "change your clothes orders." Very interesting. Just standing there will be torture enough for Dudley. I almost feel bad for Petunia...Almost. I mean, yes, what she did was wrong, but without her, Severus would not have even known that he and Harry are related. I wonder if he would think of this and be slightly more lenient with her.
Typo Alerts: "Dazed, Vernon allowed the help and seemed able to register that sitting on the ground was not a place that he would want to be at." The word "at" does not need to be in the sentence. "...bloody talking about,” Vernon had the nerve to speak at all." It is only oddly worded after the dialogue. May I suggest, "...Vernon said, surprisingly having the nerve to speak at all." "...good for you,” Snape went back to his pacing." Just a question: When did he start pacing? "Vernon was almost as bad, still shaking with fright, while Petunia stood up slowly, but all but ran from the room." Change the first "but" to either "and/yet." "Sure, the Weasley’s assured him that what his relatives..." Weasleys does not need the apostrophe, because it is not possessive but plural. Also in a later part of the same sentence, "...but no one had ever told Harry that he did not in someway deserve what he got..." separate "someway" into two words, "some" and "way."
Author's Response: Thanks for another good review!!^^ And by the way, I REALLY liked your last chapter! Made me scared, but interested. Thanks again!!
| Title: Chapter 15: Crime and Punishment
| 06 Aug 2009 8:05 pm
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| Reviewer: S.S (Anonymous)
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Love the new chapter starting to get really interesting can't wait to see what snape has for the dursleys next
Author's Response: Thank ya kindly! Glad you like it!
| Title: Chapter 15: Crime and Punishment
| 06 Aug 2009 7:47 pm
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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Fun to read!
Author's Response: Thanks!! :)
| Title: Chapter 15: Crime and Punishment
| 06 Aug 2009 7:03 pm
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| Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed)
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Wonderful chapter! Severus' handling of the Dursleys was just perfect!
I am really enjoying your story!
Author's Response: Thank you!! :)
| Title: Chapter 15: Crime and Punishment
| 06 Aug 2009 11:04 am
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| Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous)
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| Title: Chapter 15: Crime and Punishment
| 06 Aug 2009 9:11 am
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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I actually fell out of my chair from laughing so hard. I loved how Snape was so perfectly british in this chapter. cruel when angered but still polite. It was perfect.
Author's Response: Why thank you!! I felt now was the time to bring back the Severus we all know and love since he's most healed and the shock was wearing off. Glad you liked it. Thanks again for the review!!
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