| Title: Chapter 21 - Strengthened Bonds
| 15 Apr 2022 8:11 am
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| Reviewer: Wejee (Signed)
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This chapter is one of my favorites!! I love how you write Tevin and Draco at this age, they are adorable… and it makes sense that Tevin would be the more responsible of the two.
Severus is such a good father ôvô (A far cry from his own father).
I totally understand what Lucius has been through, when you see your child doing stupidly frightening things you become so afraid for them that it turns into anger…
| Title: Chapter 36 - Devleoping Connections
| 09 Apr 2022 11:22 pm
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| Reviewer: Wejee (Signed)
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My goodness, this is one amazing story!!! Few lines will not be enough to describe how good it is !!!
This story is truly magical...
# spoilers please be aware I'll be talking about some important parts in this story that may ruin your experience if you did not yet read it.
I normally hate reading biological father Snape because it usually involves infidelity which makes Lily look bad, and although I was worried at the start you proved me wrong.
I’ll start with writing. Your writing is very smooth, beautifully descriptive, and strong throughout.
I like how you tackled some concepts that can be hard to justify or explain, and authors usually avoid. For example, Tevin lived under Dumbledore’s nose but was not yet discovered, your solution was simple yet effective; changing his eye colors (even though this broke my heart) (we've seen it done before in the sixth book when Hermoine changes Harry's eyebrow color) as well as changing his name and introducing Ophelia as his pseudo mother truly conceals his Identity!
The characters in this story were also amazing, true to their canon characterization given this AU, and very complex... You also know how to develop a character!
I was especially fond of your build-up of Remus and the Malfoys ( I always thought these characters had huge potential that was wasted in the novel).
and your original characters were also very amazing. I love every one of them!
The friendship between the Malfoys and Snapes was heartwarming and endearing, they accept their differences and work with them… you address some important problems while being realistic about it. the friendship between Harry and Draco is just beautiful.
I really wish you’d consider finishing this phenomenal piece and hopefully follow it with another installment… there are many questions that are yet to be answered .. and I really want to see more of these characters' adventures.
Please consider updating this again… I’ll looking forward to it.!
P.s.
if you have any original work please let us know … I’ll look forward to reading it.
Sorry I keep editing my review, I just can’t stop thinking of this story, and whenever I reread what I write I feel it’s inadequate XD.
| Title: Chapter 12 - Reassurances
| 28 Apr 2021 3:18 pm
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| Reviewer: Cayj (Signed)
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Noooo I can't believe they took harry's eyes. Besides it's still not going to work. What happens when tevin doesn't call her mama anyway? I mean he didn't put her on the drawing and if you say mama to him he'll be looking for someone with red hair and green eyes like lily
| Title: Chapter 11 - Reminder of a Promise
| 28 Apr 2021 4:10 am
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| Reviewer: Cayj (Signed)
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Ophelias role doesn't make sense yet. I mean, for one thing if she was raped and got pregnant from it, what are the chances shed happily marry the rapist? Not to mention live with him. It's not realistic. I could see them saying she gave birth to tevin and then wanted nothing to do with him maybe. But not this. And then with severus packing harry's things and having the nerve to say it's her fault, I just can't. I mean how is it her fault that lily and james decided to keep your son or that you pledged your allegiance to two sides of a screwed up war. Yeah he saved her life but I've never agreed that a life debt had to mean me giving up mine for yours in return. Not flaming at all, I swear it,I just think this chapter kinda came together in a very nonsensical way and I think maybe you just had an idea in mind of what you wanted to do and so you made the "facts" work that way. And feel free to ignore me cause you know your story a heck of a lot better than I do, obviously, so I'm probably missing something.
| Title: Chapter 10 - Catalyst of Concession
| 28 Apr 2021 3:32 am
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| Reviewer: Cayj (Signed)
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I'll be honest I'm so confused. He has the paperwork and the pensive memories.... Legally, his right as harrys potter is well established. what right could the headmaster of a school have to remove him? Especially since dumbledore has already gone on record as saying severus was a spy, so it's not like he could turn it back
| Title: Chapter 8 - Clarity
| 27 Apr 2021 6:02 pm
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| Reviewer: Cayj (Signed)
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Honestly good riddance like deserved worse than what he said! And get death is her own stupid fault. If he knew harry was his son, he would have made another potion so both of them would live. Instead she was a selfish idiot, deciding everyone else's fates like dumbledore. How dare she decide to keep his child from him and worse with his enemy! And then she has the audacity to slap him-- if sev want a good man he should slap her back!
| Title: Chapter 7 - Recollections of a Werewolf
| 27 Apr 2021 1:21 pm
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| Reviewer: Cayj (Signed)
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I wonder why though; why was jmpeter there as pettigrew and not himself? I mean he was a marauder too so it'd make sense if he was at "james" and lily's wedding. And did they do the same thing with their wedding papers, so now if severus swipes it or whatever it'll reveal that it was really him there not james potter? I'd think he has plenty of evidence in that case, with the birth certificate, and albus can go suck an egg
| Title: Chapter 5 - Unexpected Welcome
| 27 Apr 2021 2:58 am
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| Reviewer: Cayj (Signed)
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Severus bear .... I knew I had it right, he was harry's dad all asking anyway and that's why James wouldn't play with him
| Title: Chapter 4 - A Message and a Delivery
| 27 Apr 2021 2:45 am
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| Reviewer: Cayj (Signed)
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But won't harry still look the same? I mean the whole wizarding worlds seen that pic in the prophet by now so they know what he looks like without the scar
As the plot thickens and characters develop, I really start to miss the cuteness of baby/toddler Harry....
Author's Response: He was a cute kid, but alas, all children must eventually grow up. Thank you for your review. ~ RK
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