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Reviews For Parent-Teacher Conference
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! If I thought I had the skill to pull off the Sev-tells-Harry scene then I would continue; but I don't think I have. I really appreciate the review, and yep, if I ever did continue you'd need the tissues ready!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I'm glad you liked the twist! I wasn't sure whether people would think it looked like an afterthought. In the plan I did explain a bit about Sirius and the Dursleys but then when I came to write it I realised that part just didn't fit and so I took it out. Thanks again!
My criticism would be that I think you need a beta, as there are some typos here and there and you have some date discrepancies as well that take away from what is otherwise an awesome fic. As for the dates, when the letter from Snape comes home to Sirius, it says the meeting is in April, but then everyone is suddenly talking about Harry coming home for Christmas in a few weeks. Really, that's an easy fix though. Your Sirius is quite good and sassy. My favorite part was "behave" and then "badly" lol. Very nice. I really enjoyed this fic. -P.G. Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I was a bit worried about the end because of how quickly the mood changed (and because I'm a bit of a sappy happily-ever-after sort of person) and whether it fitted but everyone seems to have liked it! *sighs in relief* Thanks for the con crit too, I really ought to get myself a beta; I'm just so darn impatient! When I've written something I just hate waiting for it to go through the beta-ering process. I fixed as many typos as I could find (I expect I missed some though) and I fixed the dates! In the plan, it was always taking place just before Christmas so I have no idea what was going through my head when I typed April! I'm glad you liked my portrayal of Sirius; he's my favourite character! Well, him and Remus. And Snape And Harry. This list could just keep on growing!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I thought that part might take a few people by surprise, I do like to add little twists though. I was slightly worried that it wouldn't work but everyone seems to have reacted well to it. Well, I really enjoyed writing it so lots of thanks to you for writing the challenge!
But otherwise, lovely! I really liked it, I thought it sweet. I loved the relationship between Sirius and Remus and Harry, and you really kept the characters (Sirius in particular) in character. Also, the twist was good, didn't see it coming. I really should by now, the amount of times it happens on this site, yet every time I'm surprised. O_o Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review and for correcting my mistakes! Harry is now on his way to 'Transfiguration' and stops by at Hagrid's Hut on the way to speak to him, and the homework is now marked in percentages. Hopefully, that's everything fixed. Thanks so much for pointing that out. I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I'm a bit of a sap for Remus-Sirius-Harry bonding but also Severus-Harry father-son, so I thought I'd add a bit of both but add the little twist that Harry doesn't know about it! Thanks again!
It has to be so hard for Severus with the situation, and I can see why he's wanting more of Harry. He knows there has to be talent there somewhere. Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I would quite like to continue too, but I just always worry that I will ruin something if I try and drag too much out of it. I also have a LOT of WIPs over at FF.net which need finishing off so I really ought to concentrate on those. A sequel might be possible though. Thanks again!
And Severus was wonderful, too. You managed to make him sympathetic in the end and I felt badly for him too. This would be a wonderful beginning to a longer story, too! If you should decide to write more, I'd love to read it. Author's Response: Thank you so much! I do a lot of writing for Guardian!Sirius and Guardian!Remus because I think they are great characters to write! They have such interesting and often conflicting personalities. They should have raised Harry, they would have been so amazing at it! I also love Snape-is-Harry's-father fics, so I couldn't resist adding that in too, and my catch; Harry doesn't know about it! Ah yes, him finding out would be interesting. But, I don't think I have the talent to be able to pull that off and I think if I attempted it and failed; it would quite ruin the fic. So, at least until I have improved a lot, it shall be standalone. Thanks again!
I've got tears in my eyes. I'd love to read a longer story. You should write a multi-chaptered story of this. It's really got potential. Author's Response: Thank you so much! I am so flattered that you liked it so much! I really enjoyed writing it and it thrills me that people enjoyed reading it! As I mentioned above, I believe it will be kept as a one-shot. I don't think I should try to drag too much out of it incase I ruin it, and I also don't want to write Harry-finding-out because I don't think I have the talent to be able to pull that off and I think my attempt to would be disastorous! Perhaps when I have had much more experience of writing and have improved a great deal I shall attempt it. Thanks so much for your compliments in the shoutbox too! That made my day!
Author's Response: I love writing Sirius! He's such a fun character but he has so many levels which is often forgotten when people are writing him as an overgrown kid, in fact, I think I have fallen into that trap many times myself. I am so glad you liked my portral of him in this, I did have so much fun writing it. I've never answered a P&S challenge before, I just saw this one in the 'news' box because of the new category and it was right up my street and now I think I'll go through the challenge section and find another! They really inspire plot bunnies! Thanks so much! |
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