|
Reviews For Serendipity
Author's Response: Hello! Thanks so much for the review! :-) I actually didn't change his age at all in that chapter. When Ginny was talking to the waiter in the beginning, she actually says that he's AROUND six months old, not EXACTLY six months old. He was actually around 2-5 days away from six months, if I remember the date of that chapter correctly. I recall timing it that way. But he was still five months old for sure in that particular chapter. In the chapters following that, which they spend in Godric's Hollow, he's definitely six months by then. Anyway, I also wanted to point out that all children develop at different paces. Some children walk at six months while others walk at eighteen. It all depends on the child. The way Sev talks around that chapter is the product of a moderately-developed mind that knows how to speak English, knows how to pronounce all the letters, but is missing a few essential tools for making all the sounds. Thus, he has some creative ways of expressing what he's trying to say. What I tried to do is stick to sounds that a little person with no teeth, a mouth, and moderate throat control can make and extrapolated from there. It's no different from baby babble, really. And five to six months is generally when they start to babble a lot. Only Sev already knows how to speak English, so it's baby babble that actually makes sense. Regular babies are still learning their first language at this stage, but Sev has the added benefit of already knowing the language. Thus, creative use of his mouth, tongue, and throat for communicating. I see no problem with the way he talks in this chapter. Once again, thanks so much for the review, and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story! :-) Winger
I hope that Draco will do the smart thing for once and accept the help that he needs. He still has a chance to change if he makes the choice to and this could be his first step.
As for this chapter - wow! What a roller coaster ride. Malfoy really has no idea when to give up does he? And now he's lost everything that he thought was important in his life. His money, his mansion, an "upstanding" name, everything. (Love that the mansion was one of the Black's to begin with BTW) Pastor Ed certainly has a job ahead of him with Draco. Even with out the muggle aspect of everything. This was an outstanding chapter. Thank you so very, very much for sharing it with us.
I have come to look forward to the story alerts in my mailbox, and I'll be on tenterhooks until next week's chapter arrives. Well done! |
Powered by eFiction 3.5 |