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Title: Familiaris 30 Jul 2010 6:50 pm
Reviewer: Carol (Anonymous) [Report This]
    OMG THAT WAS SUCH AN AWESOME ENDING TO THAT CHAPTER!!!!!! Sorry. Just...had to get that out of the way. Now that it is...I can't WAIT for the next chappie! Woohoo! I cried a lot in these past two chapters...just as much as I laughed. *sighs* Now I'm replete AND our babies are happy. I LOVE Pastor Ed. Coolest...man...EVER!
Title: Confrontations 28 Jul 2010 11:54 pm
Reviewer: Breshcandra (Anonymous) [Report This]
    This story is good but you changed the age of sev twice in this chapter alone. a 6mos or 2mos child can not talk the way you have sev talking now. But you have him done pat for a 2 year old which I have one of.

    Author's Response:

    Hello! Thanks so much for the review! :-)

    I actually didn't change his age at all in that chapter. When Ginny was talking to the waiter in the beginning, she actually says that he's AROUND six months old, not EXACTLY six months old. He was actually around 2-5 days away from six months, if I remember the date of that chapter correctly. I recall timing it that way. But he was still five months old for sure in that particular chapter. In the chapters following that, which they spend in Godric's Hollow, he's definitely six months by then. 

    Anyway, I also wanted to point out that all children develop at different paces. Some children walk at six months while others walk at eighteen. It all depends on the child. The way Sev talks around that chapter is the product of a moderately-developed mind that knows how to speak English, knows how to pronounce all the letters, but is missing a few essential tools for making all the sounds. Thus, he has some creative ways of expressing what he's trying to say. What I tried to do is stick to sounds that a little person with no teeth, a mouth, and moderate throat control can make and extrapolated from there. It's no different from baby babble, really. And five to six months is generally when they start to babble a lot. Only Sev already knows how to speak English, so it's baby babble that actually makes sense. Regular babies are still learning their first language at this stage, but Sev has the added benefit of already knowing the language. Thus, creative use of his mouth, tongue, and throat for communicating. I see no problem with the way he talks in this chapter.

    Once again, thanks so much for the review, and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story! :-)

    Winger 

Title: Familiaris 21 Jul 2010 5:54 am
Reviewer: B00kw0rm92 (Signed) [Report This]
    AHHH!!!! AMAZING!!!! Amazing, amazing, amazing! They got him!!!!!! YAY!!!!!!!!!!!! Can not wait for the next update!
Title: Familiaris 19 Jul 2010 9:50 pm
Reviewer: NotEvenHere (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I really like this story. I am not sure what it is about the story that draws me in, but it feels so cozy when I read it, like I just belong there with them. And can I just say that I love your Sirius and the fact that you've given him an important part in Harry's life and you've not made him a buffoon. Love it. Looking forward to more.
Title: Familiaris 19 Jul 2010 9:21 pm
Reviewer: DazzlingD (Signed) [Report This]
    great chapter....loved it.
Title: Familiaris 19 Jul 2010 10:50 am
Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    What a great chapter. I love the "old magic" the lady described, they should have just listened to her and not waste time with the trial. Sirius did great, can't wait to read more.
Title: Familiaris 19 Jul 2010 10:03 am
Reviewer: silverstargirl (Signed) [Report This]
    -laughs and cries- I'm ecstatic that Harry and Ginny won their case, despite the 'research' that the Malfoys did. The revelation that Lady Palimore made of course made the proceedings rather irrelevent, though, didn't it? Severus had already chosen his parents and that is something that could never be taken away from them.

    I hope that Draco will do the smart thing for once and accept the help that he needs. He still has a chance to change if he makes the choice to and this could be his first step.
Title: Familiaris 19 Jul 2010 6:31 am
Reviewer: Inu Chan (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I waited till this chapter was up to read the last 3 because I couldn't have stood leaving the courtroom scene unfinished. Hurray for Sev! Now, please put up the next chapter as soon as possible. And get Harry and Ginny married, already. They're as good as, anyway.
Title: Familiaris 19 Jul 2010 1:04 am
Reviewer: CeeCeeMee (Signed) [Report This]
    I have no idea what I'll do when you wrap up this story. I can't help but smile every time I see a notice from P&S that you've updated.

    As for this chapter - wow! What a roller coaster ride. Malfoy really has no idea when to give up does he? And now he's lost everything that he thought was important in his life. His money, his mansion, an "upstanding" name, everything. (Love that the mansion was one of the Black's to begin with BTW)

    Pastor Ed certainly has a job ahead of him with Draco. Even with out the muggle aspect of everything.

    This was an outstanding chapter. Thank you so very, very much for sharing it with us.
Title: Familiaris 19 Jul 2010 12:45 am
Reviewer: Rhyselle (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh I laughed out loud, cheered, and even wiped away a happy tear or two as I read this chapter. You could close up the story with this and it would be satisfying (but I'm really REALLY glad there's another chapter to come!). :)

    I have come to look forward to the story alerts in my mailbox, and I'll be on tenterhooks until next week's chapter arrives.

    Well done!

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