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Reviews For The Enigma of Time
Author's Response: Hello! I've placed your vote(s) in the poll =) ~shige
Author's Response: Hello! Yes, oh yes it was! Didn't you catch that limp? Crouch will be back, no worries. Just which one... Glad you're enjoying it. Thanks for reviewing! Cheers, ~shige
I would like to put a vote in for March not sure of age but she seem feisty like Ginny and smart like Hermione! Author's Response: Hello! Glad to hear you're enjoying my fic...and March! Boy! I've been getting an onslaught of Narcissa lately, and I have to say I prefer March, myself. =) Thanks for the review! It means a heck of a lot to me. Cheers, ~shige
Anyway, I see some possibilities with March, and I'm starting to like her. I don't remember if she's a lesser-known character from the books or if you've created her as an OC, but anyway, that's my vote. If she is an OC, then I guess my vote would be stuck under OC? Or maybe March OC? Depends on what the other OC voters said I guess. And if not her, then definitely an OC. I really can't see him with anyone else from this generation, whether a character you've already pulled in to the story, or one that's not been mentioned here yet but is in the books. And as far as NB/SS, how old is Narcissa? Isn't she older than Sev by something like 7 years? I thought she was in the same year as Lucius, or only one away. Taking into account the fact that he's only 19 or so at this point, I think that's a little outrageous for them to get together. Maybe in a few years... There's my two cents! Author's Response: LOL okay, guess I have to respond to this too...way to go for reading all the way, me. Yes, March is the OC. I'm glad you like her. THAT'S WHAT I SAID. But people voted for her...well, what the people want, they get. It's a democracy (or so they think =P) ~shige
One grammar point - some of your past tense irregular verbs are wrong. "Casted" is not a word, it's "cast": ~Harry turned around and cast the spell.~ That one's in there quite a few times. There's at least one other I noticed, but unfortunately I can't remember which word at this moment. In any case, just be careful with those irregulars; think twice before you just add "ed" to the end of the word! :) I love confused Dumbledore! Can't wait to see if he figures something out. And bring on more Severus - he could use a good friend this early in life. I like the way you portrayed the funeral. And Minerva/Merlin? lmao! Man, you've got guts! I'd love to see that one played out...maybe not in this story though, as you're shipping off Merlin in a day or two. Speaking of which, I like the twist of having Merlin really included in the story, in the flesh. I've never seen that. That particular scene was a bit confusing, though. I thought at first that it was just another portrait of Merlin talking to him, not the man himself. And until it started talking about him casting spells and moving around picking up objects in the room, I wasn't 100% sure he was a human in the room. If you ever do a rewrite, you might consider putting in just a sentence or two to eliminate that - a description would be nice, and would fix that problem. All in all, very good, and please continue to update steadily! And whoa, the LOOOOONG chapters! I think I worship you just for length alone! lol Seriously, I think you've got the record for longest chapters of any story I've read here or on FF (and I've seriously read 500+ stories in all fandoms in the past 3 years), judging by the size of the scroll bar on the side of my window. I LIVE for long chapters! Keep it up! Author's Response: Hello! What a long review! I love long reviews! Really? "I cast the fishing rod...I have cast the fishing rod..." I'll go look it up. It feels kinda wrong to me, but it's not 'cause I don't trust you! Thanks for telling me! I made Dumbledore confused because I didn't want to make him evil. Hah, I know...LAME. He'll try to manipulate Alex, but I think Alex's got things in hand. And Minerva/Merlin...Merlin likes Minerva, but I'm not sure about the other way 'round. We'll just see how it turns out. Some of these characters are already trying to deviate from my outline! Hmmm...okay, I think I'll fix it, though it's going to extend the word count! (: Hah! I told myself I was going to try to hit the 10 000 mark every time. I've seen a couple (like aspeninthesunlight...OMG) that are longer than mine. WAY longer. I think aspen's is 100 000 every time... =S anyways, thanks for the review and all the kind words. They're really appreciated. Cheers, ~shige
I liked this chapter and had to laugh at your healer Laurie, the mix between Hugues Laurie and Gregory House with his limp was very great. As for your poll, I can't do it on fanfiction because I don't have a login, but if you take also my opinion into account, I would prefere to see Harry with Narcissa Black. I look foreward to read your next chapter. See (read) you soon Phoenix5 Author's Response: Hello! no, it's totally okay. I actually wanted you to review and vote at the same time, if that makes any sense. yes! someone got it! no one's gotten Diane March yet... :( I'm glad you're enjoying it! Thanks for reviewing! It really makes me all warm and fuzzy inside (: Cheers, ~shige
Alex certainly has changed the way of things substantially, hasn't he? Getting rid of Lucius will be an asset, not only to Narcissa, but to Draco, who will now grow up in a far better environment. It's good that Narcissa was able to help put him away, as it will help with her healing. I wonder if Narcissa and Alex will allow the children to become playmates? I wonder how many more of the Deatheaters will be put away with the assistance of Alex? I really like Marsh and hope that she will continue to be in the story, perhaps even as a potential match for Alex? It will be good for him to have friends outside of Hogwarts. Great chapter! Author's Response: Hey! haha, I need to fix it. it's awfully cheesy right now. yep, Lucius is evil in this one (I've actually written a good one before!) we'll have to see about Draco and Harry. (: Yes, March is a potential love interest, but no one seems to like her much as no one's voted for her :( maybe they will when she starts appearing more often? Did you get the references in this chapter? =P thanks for reviewing! ~shige |
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