Title: Chapter 5
| 28 Oct 2015 4:18 am
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Reviewer: A. (Anonymous)
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I loved your characterization of a house elf, although I think the name isn't weird enough :D
Anyway I find that in fanfics when people write in house elves they have a very difficult time getting the language down. They either make it very scrambled so it doesn't make sense, or more often they write it too much like normal human speech. You got it spot on in my opinion. So I much enjoyed this chapter as it was so well written.
Author's Response: Thank you! I worked really hard at making sure Hana spoke in a way that was true to what she was while also being easy to read. I'm glad I was able to succeed! In regards to her name... I was mostly just trying to avoid the Blinky, Winky, Dobby, name-ending-in-y thing. It just didn't make sense that they should /all/ be so similar. And also, if you consider some of the other elf names, "Hana" actually is weird by comparison! :P
Thanks again for the feedback!