Nice. The only thing I found wrong was when you described McGonagall lying on the bed... if the sheets were red with blood they would be deep red, not light red. I've never seen light red blood. Otherwise a good story.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. With the light red, I probably meant that she wasn't bleeding heavily- not describing the blood, but rather the way it was absorbed into the sheets, that the quantity was so small. I'm not sure if that makes sense, but that's for catching that.
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