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Title: Frantic Tugs 30 May 2022 10:43 am
Reviewer: sarahsezlove (Signed) [Report This]
    What an exciting start.
    I love Snape described as the Master of Masks; so true.
Title: Dazed 01 Sep 2014 2:00 am
Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous) [Report This]
    please update!
Title: Dazed 26 Jul 2011 3:51 am
Reviewer: Rye (Signed) [Report This]
    Please update soon
Title: Dazed 16 Mar 2011 4:27 am
Reviewer: xVortex of MemoriesX (Signed) [Report This]
    That was a good chapter and zI liked it a lot and I ope that you update as soon as you possibly can.
Title: Dazed 12 Jan 2011 7:55 am
Reviewer: Clari_Nevermore (Signed) [Report This]
    Lovely chapter! And I feel like a relationship would take away from the heart of the story.. but that's just me.. sorry this is so abysmally short but my mom is rushing me! I promise a longer review next time, I swear!

    Author's Response: Thanks a million for the review, and it wouldn't matter if it ere just a one Khmer, god if bad, I'm just delighted to get one :) I think if I were to do a relationship between them, it wokld go very slowly, as in the course of 5 or 6 chapters and it would definitely be an aside as I don't want it to become the centre work of the fic. Just a little something or someone besides Severus to pull him out of his funks :) Again thanks a million for the feedback :D
Title: Dazed 11 Jan 2011 7:38 am
Reviewer: florence (Signed) [Report This]
    love love love this story! hmm perhaps a little love interest with Daphne on the side would be good.. however, i think it definately needs to progress slowly.
    loved the angst in this chapter by the way! update soon :)

    Author's Response: Thanks a million for the feedback. I agree it will have to develop slowly, even just because of Harrys trust issues. Anyway it would be an aside because the fic is mainly about Harry and sevie's development and it would possibly bring something lighter to the fic. Thanks again for the review :)
Title: Dazed 11 Jan 2011 7:18 am
Reviewer: HeartStar (Signed) [Report This]
    oh Poor Harry! Hopeful what she wants to do will help *S*

    Author's Response: Thanks a million for the review :)
Title: Dazed 11 Jan 2011 4:47 am
Reviewer: Channeling Snape (Anonymous) [Report This]
    "What about perhaps a burgeoning relationship between Harry and Daphne? "
    No.
    "His emotionless, faded eyes drilled into her very soul as he had passed. "
    A few sentences prior you established he wasn't even looking at her - he had his head down. Consider changing to something not logically impossible, such as "The sight of his bowed head tugged at her heart".
    "Snape was the same as ever, though a horrible ashen colour" - He can't be the same and be different. I think you mean something like, "Snape's countenance remained impassive, though belied by his horribly ashen skin".
    "In my sleep, in my wake, in the flames" - A "wake" is an observance for the dead or the wave trail behind a boat. It is not the same as "awakneness." You mean "In my sleep, while I'm awake, in the flames".
    What happened, did your beta go on holiday?

    Author's Response:

    Umm I appreciate what you have pointed out to me, so thanks for the feedback. I don't really appreciate the tone but hey, It's not something that's going to keep me up at night. Anyway, if you read my authors notes I mentioned that I did not have a beta.

     

    Firstly, what you pointed out about Harry's head being bowed and yet you said his eyes drilled into Daphne's soul. Well I didn't actually say he looked at her. I just mentioned how the emotion in his eyes seemed to drill ingto her very soul as he passed. We may to agree to disagree on this point but I believe if you have your head down it doesn't necessarily mean you can't see the person's eyes. Just that they may be weighed down with a particular problem or otherwise, which is what I meant here.

     

    Secondly, the point where Snape was the same though a horrible ashen colour. That is a contradiction we use in everyday life and I see this all the same. E.g. No one noticed except one (No one noticed, well then no one noticed but you contradict that by saying except one); There was complete and utter silence, apart from the sounds of gunshots etc etc. We use this constantly in real life, I've seen other author's use it in books.So that is something I will not change.

     

    And thirdly, where I said "in my wake", that was just an honest mistake. I do know what a "wake" is. I meant "whilst awake" but I was using my ipod to write this particular chapter and I have to be careful that the auto correct doesn't constantly change my words. That is something I will change when I get a chance.

     

    Thanks again for the review :)

Title: Dazed 11 Jan 2011 3:09 am
Reviewer: cara-tanaka (Signed) [Report This]
    Love it. Update soon :D

    Author's Response: Thanks a mill for the review :)
Title: Dazed 10 Jan 2011 11:27 pm
Reviewer: Victoire (Signed) [Report This]
    Aww... I think that Daphne could be an interesting addition to Harry's life &_&. Just, well, don't forget about Sev!

    Author's Response: Coolio, thanks for the feedback :) of course we couldn't forget about sevie could we, we all loves him too much for that :) Thanks a mill got the review :D

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