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Reviews For Digging for the Bones
Good job!
this is fantastic there are plenty of stories with similar plots, but this one is definitely the best it's very detailed and accurate (or as accurate as a magical story can be) and all the interactions are very believable i really, really love it it's truly fantastic - portraying suicide very realistically, with long recovery and variety of methods, and planning it//doing it on an impulse, and how it affects everyone around you, and how people react to it etc. all of it is just very enlightening. and the potion that allows purebloods to have their heirs is a great idea - explaining it far more than just a 'life-long glamour' or something it's great
I hope you don't mind the critism but I usually can very definitely hear your characters and their language is accurately portrayed - this really isn't right no matter how provoked she is. So glad to see you writing though. Author's Response: Minerva really is experiencing effects that are stroke-like and neurology is weird. The use of unusual-for-the-patient slang only when she gets angry is well documented. It happens (to put it simply) because the emotional/less verbal part of her brain is the part least damaged. When she gets hijacked by her emotions, the words available to her are the words most emotionally charged. So, she might even be using student slang that annoys her, f'r instance. Not because she'd ever *normally* use them, but because the words are emotionally charged and thus available. The accent might be colloqial OR it might actually be a symptom of her health problems. That sweetness and light act? Same thing...she can feel herself about to blurt out something inappropriate, so she goes into acting like Molly to get a handle on it. The actions of a strong woman trying to keep it together for the next half hour. You see it in dementia patients in the early stages sometimes. I appreciate the feedback and hope this explains some of the OTC.
Severus has grown up - a lot and so has Sirius.
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