Excellent chapter - love the last line.
Brilliant chapter - Harry's departing words to Severus - classic.
Hey,
I really liked this! I have to admit that I hesitated at first, but this was so different from everything I've read that I wanted to try it out.
I really grew to love Toby and I felt bad for him at times when it seemed as if Harry didn't take enough care of him. But he usually came around again and he's still learning how to be a parent so I suppose I can't hold it against him. I liked the way you made him more responsible because he wanted to be a good parent and idol for Toby!
I also liked the way you wrote Snape, how he slowly and grudgingly came to respect and even like Harry. How he was continually surprised by Harry and had to change his opinion. Well done!
I'm looking forward to more of this and Snape finally finding out about Toby. And, obviously, finding out if Harry really is his son and what this ominous memory of Lily's that Irma protects contains.
Just one little negative comment: Do you have a beta-reader? Because sometimes, your sentences don't completely match up and there's word missing and such. I would offer my help, by English is not my first language and I don't have a lot of free-time right now. I just thought it might be helpful.
But anyway, I'll sure read the next chapters and enjoy them!
Thank you for writing,
ai
Ooooh! I can't wait to see what happens next! Please update soon! Please?
What about the paternity potion(s)?
Nice to see more about what happened
Dramatic, but non realistic. Harry should Havel called his house-elf
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