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Title: The Truth Unfolds 06 Nov 2011 12:17 am
Reviewer: elizzza (Signed) [Report This]
    I enjoyed this story. However there are a few loose ends, like the decision Albus is forcing on them. Is there going to be a sequence?

    Author's Response: I intend there to be a consequence, but this story was meant to show how much a life can change in one night...not meant to go through the whole story. I'm wanting to address the results of what happened in a sequel that will be in a more traditional story form.
Title: The Truth Unfolds 05 Nov 2011 8:45 pm
Reviewer: Rhyselle (Signed) [Report This]
    I liked this, especially that it was James who was behind it all. Obviously this isn't going to be easy for Severus or Harry, even without Dumbledore's machinations. Speaking of the white bumblebee, I'm really ticked off at him and his actions here.

    I will admit that this feels like the first few chapters of a longer story. I'd love to see a continuation of this, where you address some of the hanging threads--like the details of the contract, whether any of the Slytherin students will be attempting to take out Harry and Sev in the next school year, having that meeting between Harry and Ron and Hermione and (hopefully) clearing the air between them, and, of course, the reaction of Harry's Housemates when school starts again. May we ask for a sequel? :)

    Author's Response: I really want to write a sequel and address all of these issues. I think that it would take place a little bit down the line so that we can see the consequences of their actions that night in motion rather than writing the lead up to it. I want them right in the thick of it in the sequel. :). Thank you so much for your review and awesome comments. <3
Title: The Truth Unfolds 03 Nov 2011 11:50 pm
Reviewer: zalievana (Signed) [Report This]
    I generally like the story, I think you have captured the characters feelings very well, the plot is good too:). However, it feels a little... "unfinished", for the lack of better word. Some moments seem too hurried to me, unnaturaly so (like Harrys confession of Dursleys treatment of him and also the very end). There are places that felt like wonderful summary of a wonderful story, but not the story itself. I think it needs a little more work but the plot is good:)

    Author's Response: I completely agree and I am so glad that you liked it. I am waiting for my beta to read over it and polish things up and once she's done I'm going to have a better idea of where to improve certain scenes and stuff. I do intend to go back and "fix" this story up a bit. It is in it's raw form at the moment. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate it and all of your wonderful suggestions and comments. :D. 
Title: The Truth Unfolds 03 Nov 2011 4:57 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Well done!

    I reall enjoyed that. You've really captured Snape and harry's insecurities, worries and fears.

    I wouldn't mind reading more about Harry and snape's relationship, should you decide to write a sequel or more from this universe.

    Author's Response: :D. Thanks. <3
Title: The Truth Unfolds 03 Nov 2011 4:55 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Well done!

    I reall enjoyed that. You've really captured Snape and harry's insecurities, worries and fears.

    I wouldn't mind reading more about Harry and snape's relationship, should you decide to write a sequel or more from this universe.

    Author's Response: Aww, thank you!! :D. I am currently obsessed with my NaNoWriMo story, but I will be going back to Harry Potter soon after November and I think I would like to delve into this particular story a little deeper. Either with a more indepth re-write of certain scenes or with a sequel. I'm not sure yet, but, again, thank you! :D.

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