Potions and Snitches
Snape and Harry Gen Fanfiction Archive

Title: Chapter 5 16 Jun 2005 2:46 am
Reviewer: Gershwhen (Anonymous) [Report This]
    WOW, I really feel badly for Harry's friends and family (Sirius). They must feel so awful -- I can't believe that someone as nice as Harry would want to hurt them with this type of lie. I might suggest that you describe a bit more about the emotions of the characters, rather than just telling us what they do. We need to see what they're feeling, it helps the reader connect to the story.

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