Potions and Snitches
Snape and Harry Gen Fanfiction Archive

Title: Chapter 10 28 May 2006 1:17 am
Reviewer: Llewellyn (Anonymous) [Report This]

    A warning, your character Eliza toes the sue line with all of her powers. Again, flaws make your characters interesting. What really stood out to me was that Ron and Hermione still were friends with him and that Harry was still very in character despite all he went through over the summer. Realize that I criticize you because I enjoy your story and want to help make it better by telling you what you are doing right and what you are doing wrong. You made some spelling errors, please go back and correct them:

     3rd and 27th paragraphs: ingredients, not ingrediants

    28th paragraph: detention, not detension

    39th paragraph: out, not otu but I think that was just a typo.

Title: Chapter 10 16 Jun 2005 3:21 am
Reviewer: Nancy Reynolds (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Awwww, a Mary Sue, and I was really enjoying the interaction between Snape and Harry :(

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