I suppose this has long been abandoned, but well done on what you have here.
Okay love it just wondering if you ever plan on continuing it.
when will you update this
(I was having difficulties reviewing last night, thus the continued review.)
So when will Harry (and Severus) realize they are father and son? How is that Severus is his father and who knows or knew? And how will Sirius react?
I hope you write more soon! This is really interesting and I'm enjoying it. Is that lack of feeling of peace and love the reason why his ghost mourns? What will happen to Harry's ghost when Severus dies? Will Severus stay with his son or will Harry follow his father?
It's a good thing I had a box of tissues next to my chair or else my computer keyboard would be wet. This was such a sad chapter! But I'm sure things will get better for Harry soon, won't they?
Bravo for a well-written chapter!
What a fascinating beginning to the story. I don't think I have ever come across a story where Harry is a ghost before. I will definitely be going to read the next chater once I finish typing this review.
I like the way you describe things and the characterization of Ghost-Harry makes me want to hug him. The only thing that I've found a bit distracting is some spelling errors and one or two cases where you used one word when you meant another ("excepted" for "accepted", for example). Given those types of errors I was wondering if English isn't your primary language or if you were using a speech to text program and dictating your story. Regardless, the errors haven't tossed me out of the story. I think you have a lovely talent at writing descriptions and personalities. The events seem vey real to me. I've added your story to my favorites list and look forward to the the rest of the tale.
| Title: Kapitel 1: Another Life Long Ago
| 20 Feb 2012 11:39 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very intense chapter thank you.
And Lily's cryptic message has probably confused Harry more than anything. Maybe she should try talking to Sev?
More please!
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