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Reviews For Field of Broken Dreams
Can't wait to find out what happens next.
I just found this and read everything at once. I really should be doing a million other things, but I just couldn't stop! The story is very engaging and substantive. I feel like each character is unique, complex, growing, and reacting reasonably- something very unusual for fanfic. Great job! I feel so bad for Harry, but he's got a lot of issues to work through before he can just run up and accept his place in this family. It is very interesting to see him next to Sam. Sam's obviously got his own feelings to sort through regarding Jo and Snape, but Sam is still understands that he is entitled to parents. It is very easy to see the differences between the two. I think that Harry is right to be suspicious of Jo. Seriously, this woman does the 'You're welcome any time, Harry!' thing and then kicks him out on his ass the first time she heard him say something mean? What in God's name is wrong with this woman? Jo can clean Harry up after fights, feed him, hug him, and smile at him all she wants- but none of it will matter because she can turn around and throw them out in a second. She has shown that her kindness and generosity are not based in concern or appreciation for Harry, so now all of it is meaningless. Besides- what if Sam hadn't provoked Harry? What if Harry lost control of his emotions and lashed out at Sam simply because he was he was there? That behavior would be consistent with that of typical teenagers and even more so with victims of abuse. Is Jo going to decide he's not worth it to have around every time Harry's feelings get jumbled or he doesn't behave sweetly? At least the Dursleys never tricked Harry into thinking they cared. Jo has a lot of explaining and a lot of growth to do before I'll warm to her again. When Snape chose Harry over that horrible woman I cheered. Even if at that moment James and Lily rose from the dead and took Harry to a loving home, I think Snape should have left. Who would want to be around somebody so callous that she could offer a loving home to an abused orphan and then rip it away knowing the pain it would cause? The sex must have been great AND Jo must have explained something we don't yet know, because I can't see Snape bringing Harry back to her to be hurt again. I also think Sam was right to be suspicious of Snape. Sam thinks that Snape is only interested in him to please Jo. From what we've seen in the Snape POV portions, that is entirely accurate. I think that since Harry pointed out Sam's suspicions, Snape has become aware of this and intentionally interacted with Sam as an individual, not simply as 'Jo's son.' You can see that Snape isn't quite used to his whole family thing either. He is constantly evolving and changing. I really love how Snape, even though he's in a cute house with a cute girlfriend and a cute couple of kids, is still Snape. His personality hasn't been erased- it has just become more complex. I love this story and I love how it is written. I can't wait to see more. Great work! Author's Response: Thanks for the review Donna. It's fun sometimes to have the characters and storyline be analyzed by others. It gives me insight into what the readers are feeling and sometimes gives me new things to write about. What I've heard several times over now is that readers are mad at Jo and think she's a bit evil. Let me explain a little more in depth here just to clarify for anyone who feels this way about Jo: 1) At the point when Jo had kicked Harry out, she did not know he had been abused, only that his family (for some unknown reason) had left him by himself. She wasn't thinking about the harm she would cause Harry by asking him to leave because she did not know it would cause him harm. 2) Joanna is a single parent who has lost her husband and two other family members. All she has left is Sam and his cousin Jason. If that wouldn't be enough to make her an overprotective mother, we've also got to look at the fact that mothers in general just want to protect their chilidren, and will always put their children first (even over step fathers and other family members... unless they just don't care about their kids). On top of that, we know already that Sam has had issues being picked on, bullied, taunted, and beaten up by bullies in the neighborhood in the past and on multiple occasions. When I wrote that portion of the story, these were the two things on my mind. Jo did not kick Harry out because she's a bad person, and she didn't do it because she's mean. She did it for the sole reason that she walked in to hear someone being mean to her son, a son she feels a deep need to protect from anything that might hurt him. Sam has lost a lot too losing his dad and aunt and uncle, and to have people sitting there telling him that they hate him, or to say other rude things... it was enough to make Jo snap, and try to remove any person who is doing anything she perceives as 'harmful' to her son. She was also feeling a bit betrayed, to have a guest she'd welcomed into her home, someone her son had become good friends with, turn around and say something she perceived to be so harmful to her only child. That being said, it's unfortunate that Harry already had abandonment issues at that point, and so her kicking him out just brings up the same old issues in new ways for Harry (more angst for me to write about), but none of this was her intentions. I cannot say as a mother, that if a guest (whoever that might be) were taunting or being mean to my daughter, that I would not also tell them that they are no longer welcome in my home. I don't care if it's a family member or a friend, if someone comes into my home and hurts my daughter in any way, they're going to be forced to leave, even if it will hurt their feelings. But again, Jo wasn't even thinking of Harry's feelings, only of protecting her son. I hope this clears things up for readers. Thanks for the review!
Both of your OCs are realistic and I love how Harry sees Severus as a human being. This really is a very touching story and I can't wait for more. I'll be right there with Kai, pestering you to update.
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