Thank you for sharing the link with me. I enjoyed this opening chapter because it's so different than the usual opening. We are given a completely different POV, Petunia's, and it almost makes her seem even colder. She doesn't shy from her feelings and they are justified in her own mind, which highlights why she's such a bad person.
I think that you could use some help with how the odd thing is worded, for example: "'Of course, the whole day would be spoiled by the very thought about her!'" - grammatically speaking, it should be "the thought *of* her" not *about*.
Overall, the first chapter managed to be new and fresh, while reminding us of the start of most HP books, it was short - which is good because it didn't have a lot of plot - and the end left us reeling because the birth certificate promises a treat to come.
Thank you for sharing
Vee
Author's Response: Thank you Vee for the review :D
| Title: Prologue: Morning at the Dursley's
| 06 May 2021 3:32 pm
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| Reviewer: Arti (Signed)
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Wow. It's so Petunia!
Author's Response: I tried hard, thank you!
| Title: Prologue: Morning at the Dursley's
| 19 Apr 2021 8:11 pm
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| Reviewer: Megim (Signed)
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Nice one!
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| Title: Prologue: Morning at the Dursley's
| 04 Apr 2021 12:42 am
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| Reviewer: cavehack (Signed)
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I love the way you’ve written the prologue through Petunia’s perspective. It was so nicely done.
Author's Response: Thank you:)
| Title: Prologue: Morning at the Dursley's
| 22 May 2013 3:01 pm
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| Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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Great start!!
Author's Response: Thank you :)
| Title: Prologue: Morning at the Dursley's
| 21 May 2013 9:54 pm
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| Reviewer: Sirena (Signed)
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Dostane to samo jeśli przeczytam polska wersje z ff czy polecasz angielską? ;)
Author's Response: :D W polskiej Jest cały drugi rozdział :D
Excellent story so far. I haven't seen one done quite like this before and I really like it. Well done
Author's Response: Thank you ;)
Excellent story so far. I haven't seen one done quite like this before and I really like it. Well done.
Excellent story so far. I haven't seen one done quite like this before and I really like it. Well done.
Excellent story so far. I haven't seen one done quite like this before and I really like it. Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you! :D
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