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Title: A secret that can't be told 19 Apr 2014 6:19 am
Reviewer: ArmyAngel5 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I LOVE IT!

    You should make him a Mouse Lemur next.
Title: A secret that can't be told 07 Feb 2013 6:32 am
Reviewer: Ariel Chan (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Interesting animagus choices. Ferret Harry is the best and cutest of all. I have some animagus suggestions for future chapters:

    hawk/eagle
    penguin
    bear
    dog
    Llama
    snake

    Thanks in advance for updating your story soon!
Title: A secret that can't be told 04 Feb 2013 10:29 am
Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I would love to see more of anyof these stories
Title: A secret that can't be told 03 Feb 2013 10:42 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Haha, that was funny. Who would have guessed that he was a ferret?

    Harry would never tell anyone what his animagus... is.

    Whenever you have question words in a sentence, asking a question like, what would happen if Ron knew what he became? it has to end in a question mark.

    I noticed a phrase that was wrong: "No one can ever learn of these" should be "No one can ever know."

    Keep writing, you will improve the more you try. There are lots of different websites that can teach you correct grammar and other things as well if you would like to learn.
Title: When Life hands you nuts, What do you make? 03 Feb 2013 10:39 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    If you use the past tense it is "It happened so quickly" not "it happen so quickly."

    Ron, Hermione, and he

    were working.... finding their

    "there" is a place, "their" belongs to people, and "they're" means they are.

    Are you not a native English speaker? It is very hard to write in English. Please ask around and find a beta to check over your work and help you.

    I was so glad that Harry was able to float down to the bottom of the astronomy tower, instead of falling to his death. Very cute.
Title: They are laughing at you not with you. 03 Feb 2013 10:35 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    This is a very interesting premise. It was very hard to read the story though, because of all the writing mistakes. Please find a beta to fix your work before you post.

    Please make sure that every name starts with a capital letter, like Harry.

    Ron and Hermione were too busy.... "where" is a place and "were" is a way to be.

    Harry was taking a break from dating... not form dating. A form is a noun, either a piece of paper of questions that you fill out, or a shape.

    All the mistakes make this story very difficult to read, which is too bad because it would be a much better story if there weren't so many errors.

    I do like the inventive animagus forms.
Title: A secret that can't be told 01 Feb 2013 9:12 am
Reviewer: Lilyflower5 (Signed) [Report This]
    I have two animals one is a kangaroo and the other ia a dingo and for a full story request is either the two abouve or a koala i recon harry would make a cute koala with big green eyes

    Author's Response:

    Okay i will put them on my list. But i have a question, would you like a de-aging story where harry is turned into a toddler, and each chapter has a picture drawn like toddler harry drew it. If so can you help me get some ideas here are the pics i have so far.

     http://oi48.tinypic.com/wrjsqa.jpg

     and

    oi50.tinypic.com/sesgeq.jpg

Title: A secret that can't be told 01 Feb 2013 6:25 am
Reviewer: SeverusPrince101 (Signed) [Report This]
    This is great so far!!! I was wondering if you could write about something fiercer, like a Painted wolf! they live in Africa, known as the African Wild Dogs. Or maybe have Harry turn into a Scarlet macaw, that would be funny.

    Author's Response: Okay, i have two planed already but i'll put it on my list! Thanks for the review!

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