I've read a number of action/adventure novels through the years by various authors (ex. Ian Fleming, Alistair MacLean, Colin Forbes, Craig Thomas, Clive Cussler, to name a few faves), and your writing in this chapter describing the battle scenes is certainly on a par with the best in the world. I am absolutely stunned at the sheer realism you've depicted. Wow! Of course, I ended up in tears by the end, but that's okay, too...
Author's Response: The action and realism is that good? Wow, I am speechless. Thank you, so much. I think that just made my year ... ;)
I have to say that your story is getting me to THINK again a little - it's all too easy to accept the "we won, it's all over" political gloss, and forget about the consequences of war to ordinary people. Nearly 100 years after the "war to end all wars" and they're still happening constantly. We seem to learn nothing! Ref this chapter, I think you've done a pretty good job of showing the hardship and sheer terror of war, even though I'm sure it's many times worse in reality. I always think it's a sign of a well written piece when I find myself reading faster and faster - and I did.
Author's Response: Hi rosina! I am glad that I've gotten your brain engaged. I totally agree with you, how easy it is to forget just what an impact war has had on generations and the lives we live today, and what impact war still has on the world. I am glad you are pleased with my attempt at depicting war. I soemtimes feel I could have made it a lot more horrific and gruesome, but no matter what, words on a page can only ever be a shadow of what it would be like. So I went more for the way it made Severus feel and think rather than purely what he saw. Haha, I do the same when I'm reading something I enjoy, so I'm glad this chapter made you speed read! Cheers, and thanks for reviewing!
Wow. Just wow. You have a real gift with storytelling in how you have written this chapter. The war pieces are horrific, but not so terrible as to make me stop reading. And then the part at the end with Harry is both tragic yet heartwarming.
Author's Response: Hi! It is wonderful to hear that you are enjoying the story, and the little part with Harry at the end! Thanks so much for the kind words and feedback. :) Cheers.
| Title: Saving Grace
| 10 Sep 2013 12:41 pm
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| Reviewer: lola (Anonymous)
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It's really good story :)
Author's Response: Hi lola! Great to hear you are enjoying it. ;) Thanks for taking the time to review!
You had me crying by the end of this, specially since Sev, poor dear Severus was imagining his homecoming with a smiling Lily at the other side only to get his hopes killed in the most horrific of ways. I can't imagine the sheer amount of pain that must be coursing through his heart. When I cry from normal sadness even then I feel like my heart is being shattered, so how must that feel? I wonder, even now knowing that I NEVER want to experience it. Keep up the good work, can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Hello! Wow, thank you so much for the detailed review. Yeah, this chapter sure hurt to write in parts, and I am glad I too cannot fully imagine just what that would feel like. I have lost people, but thankfully never in the way Severus does in this story. Thanks again for reviewing, and more is on the way, same time next week!
What a heartwrenching chapter...you could just feel the tension and fear and horror. I hope one of the resolutions you have coming in the story is maybe Harry finding Ben or what happened to him. I think it'd be good closure for Severus.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the feedback! That would be a good way for Severus to find closure, indeed. Cheers!
Very descriptive. And heart wrenching. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the feedback! Great to hear you thought it was emotional and descriptive.
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