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Title: Chapter 1: Happy Place 24 Mar 2014 1:29 pm
Reviewer: An avid reader (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Very good story, but even though you fixed a lot of grammar....it still needs some work.

    I highly recommend looking at present vs. past tense. For example... Instead of 'he tries to.' It should be 'he tried to'

    Most of the time when you are writing a third person story you want to switch to past tence because you are telling the story as an observer. If you wold like an help please email me at swampgliders@gmail.com I'm here normally as swamygliders, but my ipad wouldn't let me sign in. :)
Title: Chapter 6: But I'm not Suicidal...Am I? 22 Mar 2014 2:12 am
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Thank you a very a gusty chapter

    Author's Response: Yeah, This was mostly written at a particular hard time in my life, so the words had easily flowed from my mind and to my fingers. By far the easiest story I've written, but it's very emotional I've noticed Oh well..Thanks for the review, it means alot!
Title: Chapter 5: Can you Keep a Secret? 22 Mar 2014 2:02 am
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Thank you a great chapter

    Author's Response: Youre welcome, an thanks for the review!
Title: Chapter 4: What is Trust? 22 Mar 2014 1:46 am
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Painful but well written thank you
Title: Chapter 3: When in Doubt Deny Everything 22 Mar 2014 1:19 am
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Thank you a good chapter
Title: Chapter 6: But I'm not Suicidal...Am I? 20 Mar 2014 1:32 am
Reviewer: crotia (Signed) [Report This]
    genius

    Author's Response: Yes! *happy Dance*
Title: Chapter 4: What is Trust? 19 Mar 2014 2:34 am
Reviewer: crotia (Signed) [Report This]
    I liked the portrait
Title: Chapter 6: But I'm not Suicidal...Am I? 18 Mar 2014 10:04 pm
Reviewer: Outlawgal (Signed) [Report This]
    Severus has his hands full not just with Harry but with Draco too it seems.
    I don't know how Harry thinks that saying he wasn't trying to kill himself was true especially with the conversation with Draco.

    Author's Response:

    Ehh...maybe not, but I dont know...I think that Draco may have just been saying it so Harry wouldn't do it, but you never know with a Malfoy ;p

    Some of the people who tend to be a bit sucidal aren't even fully aware of it. LIke in the everyday things you do, for example, randomly crossing a train track, they'll think oh, what if train came and hit me, before dismissing the thought and going about their day. He just thought aloud not totally aware of what he was truly saying. IF he had I'm sure he wouldnt have said it in front of Draco, especially if he knew the rsponse he'd get. 

Title: Chapter 1: Happy Place 18 Mar 2014 10:53 am
Reviewer: crotia (Signed) [Report This]
    Nice start
Title: Chapter 5: Can you Keep a Secret? 06 Mar 2014 5:34 pm
Reviewer: Lady Destiny (Signed) [Report This]
    Please update again soon! Looking forward to reading more!

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