| Title: Chapter 8: Epilogue
| 09 Aug 2014 9:37 pm
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| Reviewer: Lea (Anonymous)
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Hello :)
For me the ending seemed a bit accelerated and forced. I would love to read a little bit about arranging a day-to day life and relationship between Severus and Harry and of course about Ron's reaction to this :)
But of course, it's your decision.
I like your fic very much :)
I hope you will write something more :)
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, even if you did not like the ending. I am debating adding a bit more, or perhaps writing a companion fic or something. We'll see. Thanks for reviewing!
| Title: Chapter 8: Epilogue
| 09 Aug 2014 3:52 pm
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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I just read your whole story and really enjoyed the premise and development, but do feel like the ending was very abrupt and you left a lot unexplored...especially with the last revelation of how severe the abuse got for Harry at the Dursleys. I would be very interested to see a companion piece from Harry's perspective about the first time things happened at the Dursleys...ie:the first time harry was tied up when they left, the first time he was cuffed in the yard, the first time he was left in the basement, the first time he was left in the basement for a whole weekend, the first time he realized it was going to be recurring weekend experience...there is so much development and exploraation you could do within this world you've created. I'd really be interested to see more exploration with harry. Whether you did that as a sequel and explore those moments there, or as a completely separate story and write from a present tense perspective (I'd be more interested in a present tense companion piece then a sequel). But again, I really enjoyed this story, I think it just ended leaving a lot unexplored
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review and the constructive criticism, I really genuinely appreciate! I think you are right, there is a lot left unexplored here, I more felt that the overall purpose of the story had been served. Some reviewers have seemed to agree with me, a few have not. I have considered writing a sequel or companion piece, and I actually really like your idea. I will seriously consider writing something from Harry's perspective about the abuse. Thank you so muh for the feedback!
That was a fun story. I have never read one with a premise like that. The chapter where the two of them were stuck together made me laugh. I'm glad they worked everything out in the end. I always like our heroes to have a happy ending.
Author's Response: thanks, I'm so glad to hear you liked it!
| Title: Chapter 8: Epilogue
| 08 Aug 2014 12:58 am
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| Reviewer: crotia (Signed)
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Yeah, I just reviewed and than this chapter showed up. That's ehat I call timing. And You can be really proud cause you finished i and Merlin knows half the stories out there aren't. Your writing is af good quality in writing and a partly overlapping the other half half misses that. And than we have a quarter left. About ten percent of that quarter make their stories to long and keep writing after the point where they long since should have stopped or started a sequel. And finally the big taste thing. And of the last 15 percent 5 percent just doesn't agree with me in plot taste. What's left is about seve percent that are awfully nice stories. And than the last three percent among which I place you. TO AWESOME, AMAZING, KICKING BUTT, JUST MY TASTE stories.
Thank you
Author's Response: Haha, thank you! I appreciate it! I'm glad you agreed that the story was ready to end. I might consider a sequel, we'll see where my muse takes me. I'm so glad you liked the story though!!
I love the last line of the story. It really ties in the beginning and what caused them to bond and reach this point.
Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah it was a kind of nifty idea that I thought of about halfway through the story. I like it :). Thanks for reviewing!
| Title: Chapter 7: Revelations
| 08 Aug 2014 12:43 am
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| Reviewer: crotia (Signed)
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So the story is nearing it's end isn't it? I must say I've greatly enjoyed it and I'm totally looking forward to the last parts. Unless you want to keep on writing about adventures after Snape becomes guardian. But personally I think that would be better as a sequel.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like it! I agree that more about Snape being his guardian would be better as a sequel. I'm not sure if I'll write it though, I'll have to see.
| Title: Chapter 7: Revelations
| 07 Aug 2014 10:34 pm
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| Reviewer: Lili (Anonymous)
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Harry wanting Severus to be his guardian and Severus mildly freakish out about it brought tears to my eyes.
Author's Response: Wow, I'm so glad you were so moved by it! Thank you so much for reviewing!!!
| Title: Chapter 7: Revelations
| 07 Aug 2014 8:48 pm
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| Reviewer: Lea (Anonymous)
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Another great chapter :)
I like the possibility of shared guardianship very much :)I'm curious, how Harry will react to this .
Author's Response: thanks for the review!
| Title: Chapter 6: Letters
| 21 Jul 2014 5:07 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you, a difficult chapter and difficult material but you handled it well
Author's Response: thank you, I'm so glad you liked it! thanks for reviewing!
| Title: Chapter 6: Letters
| 21 Jul 2014 5:07 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you, a difficult chapter and difficult material but you handled it well
Author's Response: thank you, I'm so glad you liked it!
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