| Title: Broken Wings
| 07 Oct 2014 10:59 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you an excellent chapter
The lack of reviews on this is criminal. I really was not expecting Moody to be the one behind torturing Harry, but I can't say that I'm surprised Lockhart is vile. I'm glad that Harry -and- Draco have Severus now.
| Title: Three May Keep a Secret
| 05 Oct 2014 6:53 am
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| Reviewer: Lili (Anonymous)
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Wonderful chapter. I love Harry's thirst for comfort. You left it at such a cliffhanger!!! Please update soon or I may just go mad ;-; xD
Good chapter.
Yes, I beta for Paganaidd. Let me if you ever want to use me. (There were several SPaG errors in this chapter, but they were all minor, except maybe for "like he done." I don't mean to nitpick; after more than forty years as a professional copy editor, I can't help noticing.)
Creepy ... I wonder who's taken Harry? Clever tactic of Snape's, telling Draco that Harry was dead. That grief should cover up plenty of thoughts the Dark Lord can't see. Hmm, I don't know about Dumbledore's lack of a reaction about Harry missing. Why wouldn't Snape give Dumbledore some of the facts, like Harry having been on the tower and then disappeared? Dumbledore would probably take him seriously then.
I wonder what Snape's planning! Definitely curious to see who's got Harry too - yikes!
Oohh ... I love it! You've caught me with Draco's personality.His reasoning and motives are highly realistic.
The idea overall, with the letters is really cool. I don't think I have ever seen it done before, so high fives for you! I love the idea of the monster in the dark as well.
Oh, just a note, latter as you used it would require two t's - the usage in the story is missing one. :) I like to know if I make a typo so I can fix it (and goodness knows I make too many)so I thought I'd mention that.
Also, nice little allusion to Freud's work with Harry calling himself the Id. No doubt you chose it as reference to the letters possibly containing or having been motivated by Harry's hidden desires? Well, on I go!
| Title: The Right Friends
| 30 Sep 2014 1:35 am
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| Reviewer: my_patronus_is_a_dinosaur (Anonymous)
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WOW - VERY powerful storyline! Amazing details, angsty emotions, very well written! Compelling! I can't wait to read more!
The story is intriguing, but I wish you'd be more careful with details: Moody's first name is spelled Alastor, breath is "bated" not "baited," Brits say "Mum" not "Mom," and so on. Everyone lets some mistakes slip through, but yours are frequent enough to be distracting. Please get yourself a beta. I wouldn't bother to suggest this if I didn't think your fic was worth the effort, so please don't be offended.
Author's Response: You're beta-ing Digging the Bones, aren't you? I think part of the problem with the mistakes is the co-authorness of it. We're each other betas. I realized his first name was misspelled after the first time it was used, and then continued misspelling it on purpose to make it consistent at least. Point on the "bated," I suppose. I've heard Brits say "Mom" too. It's personal preference. No offense taken.
| Title: The Right Friends
| 28 Sep 2014 6:00 am
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| Reviewer: Lili (Anonymous)
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Wonderful!!! I love the development! Looking forward to more.
| Title: The Right Friends
| 28 Sep 2014 5:42 am
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| Reviewer: eclipse (Anonymous)
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Amazing... please update some more :)
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