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Reviews For Spiral of Trust
I loved the students being able to relax with butterbeer. The plant was genius. It seems that Snape will be strict and is letting the students know that. That is wise - he has so many students of age, so it is good that he is reminding them of the rules, and putting his foot down to some behavior. They can always leave if they want to. It was kind of sad to see some students stand up and take offense at Snape. Good that the Gryffindors support him though. I loved your portrayal of Neville and Luna. I hope Luna gets better. Great chapter. Great development of this story. Very imaginative with the elderberries and the Planta sensitiva. Funny that Hermione got kicked out! Thanks for all the updates! Author's Response: Neville and Luna are minor characters in this story, but there will be more about them later on.
It's no fault of the students and they shouldn't be penalized by taking away a position of authority, leadership and trust within the school. It's basically saying that unless you were a supporter of voldemort, or you are a pureblood (those that attended the previous year) you won't be allowed leadership positions or to participate in Quidditch no matter what. Wrong message to send IMHO. It should be based on merit, not blood status and political outlook. Still, I quite enjoy the story. Snape is dick and I can't see why Harry even cares about him at this point. Seriously, Harry has taken enough abuse and given Snape more than enough chances. Enough is enough. A relationship with him is just not possible unless Snape changes on his own. Plus, I hate to see harry not stick up for himself and enforce boundaries against those that want to hurt him... ie Snape. Harry needs to grow up a bit in this area I think. Major kudos on not glossing over the rage, hurt, and desire for vengeance the students that suffered under Snape feel. Also kudos for not glossing over the immense distrust they feel towards him.... with good reason. It just can't be ignored. In RL, I suspect those students that reveled in the ability to hurt the disfavored students will meet with some comeuppance, no matter what anyone says and I can't say I blame them. Tough subject matter for sure and I can't wait to see where you go with this! Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! You’re right of course - it is unfair what Snape does to the pupils who were unable to attend school the previous year. He justifies his decision by stressing the importance to study for the exams. In his mind, he probably thinks he is helping them. But he is high-handed and disregards the problem that he is at the same time punishing them, like you pointed out.
It's possible, however, that the employers of the wizard society, being aware of what happened during the war 1997-1998, will give the students who graduate after an extra year at Hogwarts priority over those who stayed during Voldemort’s regime. Maybe it will be the purebloods who will have to justify themselves? Maybe its them who will be at a disadvantage when applying for the leadership positions in the wizard world, prefect status or not?
Author's Response: Thank you. "Mass scenes" are more complicated to write and get to make sense, I think, than a dialogue between just a few people. Even if the dialogues are more intense and emotional, I believe that you need to alternate different kinds of scenes in a story to make it interesting in the long run. So I did my best, although I found it a bit difficult.
Author's Response: Exactly so :-)
Author's Response: Thank you :-) We're in for a whole year at Hogwarts before this story ends... |
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