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Reviews For Spiral of Trust
Title: Chapter 30 A holiday goes awry 05 Nov 2015 5:41 am
Reviewer: Reader629 (Signed) [Report This]
    I quite enjoyed your haunting vignette with the man in the cemetery
Title: Chapter 30 A holiday goes awry 19 Jun 2015 9:25 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Loved the Paris interlude thank you
Title: Chapter 30 A holiday goes awry 17 Jun 2015 7:11 am
Reviewer: retaco (Signed) [Report This]
    You are evil... How could you leave it like that? How often do you update? So far I've read it from the beginning... It's always bad when you are getting into the story and finally catch up to what has been posting. I'm loving the story so far and hoping it doesn't take too long for the update. Reyes

    Author's Response: I'm happy to have a new reader review my story and glad that you like it! I updated just NOW! I generally do weekly updates - one or two chapters at a time. Enjoy :-)
Title: Chapter 30 A holiday goes awry 15 Jun 2015 8:23 pm
Reviewer: Buchling (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I love Paris too, so I really liked this chapter. I also found your description of Ginnys inability to grasp the muggle world intriguing. To not understand the concept of the grave of the Unknown Soldier you must live under a rock at the bottom of the sea or in the wizarding world. As she was never exposed to anything muggle it is very understandable, but also shows a rather severe void in the perception of the world. She sees magic as the only solution to explain a patio heater.... lol.
    However, it would be so great if Harry - in his scientific work - found a way to combine technology with incantations or something like that. Of course you can write whatever you want, I just think it would be a nice subplot to broaden the perception of all things muggle. Science has its own magic after all.
    Can’t wait for the next update, you are doing great.
    Also thanks for always giving detailed answers to the reviews, it must be a lot of additional work to do so.

    Author's Response:

    I truly enjoy the readers reviews, whether they are simply short, encouraging comments, or point out a mistake or an inconsistency in the text that I am eager to correct, or are longer reflections, like yours, on the magic and on the characters of the story. One may attempt to understand magic with a scientific approach - it’s probably in vain, but very fun to do so, so why not toy with the theories? Your idea to mix magic and (Muggle) science is really interesting. Arthur Weasley is actually working with ”Muggle artefacts”, isn’t he? Maybe Harry, with his advantage of being familiar with both worlds, could come up with some new invention? I’m afraid ’Spiral of Trust’ is already finished (approximately fifteen more chapters to go), so I will have difficulties to fit it in, however. And that is probably why I have the time to answer the reviews. I only need to proof-read each chapter thoroughly before posting it, but I guess that if you’re in the middle of a writing process, which is terribly time-consuming, it might be harder to do so. I enjoy getting answers to my reviews, anyhow, so that’s why I make an effort to answer yours :-)

Title: Chapter 30 A holiday goes awry 13 Jun 2015 6:40 pm
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    I enjoyed Harry and Ginny site seeing tour of Paris. Paris at night in the cemetery was especially mesmerizing. The ghouls and the story of the widower were a special magical touch to the chapter. One comment - you wrote that he 'grabbed the woman by her waste.' You want to use waist.

    Author's Response:

    Oh bother! That was an embarrassing mistake. The computer will not highlight it and I obviously was blind when proof-reading, not really having the intuition of the language. Thank you for helping out! 

    My friend who is beta-reading my text unfortunately has a lot to do at work, so I have chosen to post ahead, as I don’t want to drag it out (you lose the pace of the story when the updates are months apart and my friend is only at chapter 11…). I take pains to review the chapters one by one as thoroughly as possible before posting. I’m afraid there are more mistakes - prepositions, for example, that’s enough to give you a headache… I’m doing my best, though, and learning a lot in the process. If you want to read a better version of this story you might try to reread it in twelve months or so and the language will probably have improved :-)

Title: Chapter 30 A holiday goes awry 12 Jun 2015 1:28 pm
Reviewer: alexander (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Thank you for this amazing story! I just couldn't stop reading and i can't wait for the next chapter! I really like your writing style

    Author's Response: Thank you for reading and appreciating the story! Much more is coming :-)
Title: Chapter 30 A holiday goes awry 12 Jun 2015 10:43 am
Reviewer: BlueWater5 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Loved Snape's reaction. Interesting the "magic" on the dance floor. Not good that hours later they haven't reported in. Please update again soon!

    Author's Response: Thanks! The events in Paris will be unravelled soon, but there will be further complications... I'll be updating in a few days :-)
Title: Chapter 30 A holiday goes awry 11 Jun 2015 3:30 pm
Reviewer: teriwright (Signed) [Report This]
    :-) Of course a writer must indulge in one's fancies. That's the entire point of writing isn't it? Us readers are a secondary concern I would think.

    Can't wait for more!

    Author's Response: Thanks! Although I do care about you readers as well, naturally. Otherwise I would not publish the story, but keep it to myself... Sometimes what I picture in my head and write down is not at all what the readers perceive and react to and that is very valuable for me to know in order to become a better writer.
Title: Chapter 30 A holiday goes awry 11 Jun 2015 11:58 am
Reviewer: tb_ll57 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I don't object at all to taking a chapter to explore Paris! I loved how Harry and Ginny debated whether this or that could be magical or just Muggle, and all the things they explored added to the feeling of quiet wonder and youthful dreaming of this chapter. I was enchanted with the graveyard and the Stone-Faced Widower-- that was a fantastic story within a story. This had something of the feeling of the first Harry Potter book, the first time Harry went to Diagon Alley and all the things that were just wonderfully different and unexpected. Paris with its ancient magic felt alive with secrets.

    I also appreciated a little more insight into their relationship. I like that as you've written them they're not totally compatible; Harry is somewhat shy and wishes for anonymity, whereas Ginny loves the spotlight and longs to be seen. But they work together and even when they argue a bit about their worldview it's clear they still adore and respect each other.

    And now we know the fate of the Auror who was trailing them for Mrs Steady. Everything happened too suddenly for anyone to activate the watches Steady gave them. I wonder how the attacker knew to target the Auror? I sense more revelations coming...

    Excellent as always!

    Author's Response: Thank you for appreciating this chapter as I so wish to do Paris justice - it is a magical city! I'm glad that you liked the story of the Stone-Faced Widower, too!

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