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Title: Chapter 33 Angst, Oblivion and Regrets 25 Jan 2021 10:03 pm
Reviewer: ImUpToNoGood (Signed) [Report This]
    I really don’t like this Ginny. Her fear of experiencing anything but pleasure and joy makes her feel shallow, although I suspect it is due to the depths of pain she has experienced with Riddle’s diary. But her unwillingness to sort out her emotions, always repressing them or taking a shortcut, means she will never have the emotional maturity that Harry will develop. She will never be his equal.

    I also don’t see that she makes any compromises for Harry, it is always him making compromises for her.

    Even the fact that Harry has never taken her ambitions seriously is a mark against a successful relationship between them.

    I do hope that either she grows up, or he finds someone to be a true equal to him.

    Oh, and word note: to go mad is to go insane. To get mad is to get angry. (Very different!)
Title: Chapter 33 Angst, Oblivion and Regrets 30 Aug 2016 8:52 am
Reviewer: Twinheart (Signed) [Report This]
    I love this story. But I have to say, I am really not fond of Ginny. Truth is, she has always been self-centered and a bit spoiled.(In canon, as well as here). She always has to have things her way. She thinks she loves Harry...but only if he does everything she wants. And BTW, they just escaped an attack in a foreign country - where Harry was forced to KILL their attacker! Ginny is Harry's only magical witness. Wouldn't it be a good idea if she waited to ERASE her memory AFTER testifying to Harry's act of self-defense?? Or is Harry's health and safety less important than Ginny's Quidditch tryouts? Sadly, I think the answer is pretty clear.
Title: Chapter 33 Angst, Oblivion and Regrets 10 Oct 2015 4:18 am
Reviewer: JCJ58 (Signed) [Report This]
    I have been reading your story for 2 days, and am really enjoying it, but I do have to say, I just really don't like Ginny much. She's not my favorite character in cannon either, but she's just really selfesh and kind of hateful.

    Author's Response: Hmm... I know that several readers are not happy with this Ginny, and I neither can nor do I want to defend her, but I think that she is more immature than hateful. I'm glad that you're enjoying the story :-)
Title: Chapter 33 Angst, Oblivion and Regrets 13 Jul 2015 8:37 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Fantastic! You handled the emotions in this chapter really well and I loved the conversations between Harry and Severus so sad. Thank you so much
Title: Chapter 33 Angst, Oblivion and Regrets 08 Jul 2015 3:04 am
Reviewer: Pianoparamour (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I'm not going to sugar coat it. Ginny as characterized in this story is far from my favorite person. She is constantly concerned about what she wants to do, and Harry gives in to nearly every one of her demands, no matter how uncomfortable it makes him, or how unreasonable she is. And yet, in this chapter, she gets even worse, and Harry is convinced to stay with a bull-headed, selfish woman who refuses to temporarily sacrifice even a few of her trivial amusements for the psychological good of the man she is supposed to love. I did actually hope that Harry would have let her drift away from him or that they would have broken up. She isn't good for him.

    That being said, this story is well done and I enjoy your updates.

    Author's Response:

    I’m aware that Ginny is not very popular with you readers right now and I’m afraid that the chapter I am posting now is only going to boost that irritation. She’s immature and selfish, yes, but she is young and has suffered a lot of traumas (a war and a terrorist attack) and the way she acts now may not be characteristic of her personality when she grows up a bit, so I think that you should not dismiss her entirely. That said, she is not a favourite character of mine either - I am more fond of Hermione, actually, even if I have not given her a very prominent part in this story yet. 

    I must also confess that I use Ginny’s character in these chapters to stress how lonely Harry actually is. He has no family of his own whatsoever and that manifests in particular when the Weasleys need to take care of one of ”their own” during a crisis like this one. Hopefully you’ll see in the next chapter what I mean. Thank you for reviewing!


Title: Chapter 33 Angst, Oblivion and Regrets 05 Jul 2015 11:50 pm
Reviewer: Buchling (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Non-Healer Schufflert is driving me mad. Again she demonstrated her never ending criminal streak also known as incompetency. Almost forcing the Oblivation on Ginny while she still was in the middle of a panic attack ... Of course Ginny is grasping for straws. So far no one has offered her a way to deal with her trauma that is suitable for her. Obviously sessions with Non-Healer Schufflert are not the right thing for her, but there are actually many different ways to treat or to deal with trauma and she was offered or even told about none. As for the Oblivation, common sense tells us it should only be allowed as a last resort after everything else failed or if the patient is in grave danger to hurt herself severely. Having said that, Ginny has a very crude understanding of what strength means. Fighting your way back into wholesomeness and accepting help while doing so is true strength.
    On Harrys part I think he needs to learn to assert himself in his relation with Ginny and fast.
    All in all another excellent chapter. You really manage to make the story intense with many deep topics while still keeping it light enough to make it fun to read.
    PS. I read your answer to another review where you said it is easier for you to write in English even though it isn’t your mother tongue. I completely understand that and sometimes feel the same way. It’s weird, isn’t it? May I take a guess at your native language; you don’t need to confirm or deny if that runs under “private”. Is it German or a Germanic language?

    Author's Response:

    Thank you, that was a very kind assessment of my story.

     

    There is nothing as frustrating, nor as scary as incompetence, is there? Especially if the person is unaware of his or her incompetence, like Healer Schufflert seems to be (I’m sorry, but she did graduate from Magical Med school and has not yet lost her license, so she still is a healer…). Unless the incompetence shows itself in an area where you possess enough knowledge to debunk it, you might be left at the mercy of incompetent persons without even realising it… 

     

    My mother tongue is not German, but a North Germanic language, so you were right in a way - I’m curious as to what led you to determine that? Phrasing and word choices, perhaps :-) 


Title: Chapter 33 Angst, Oblivion and Regrets 05 Jul 2015 7:16 am
Reviewer: alexander (Anonymous) [Report This]
    This was probably the best chapter yet! Wow! Perfect!

    Author's Response: Great! Thank you! 
Title: Chapter 33 Angst, Oblivion and Regrets 05 Jul 2015 12:59 am
Reviewer: RLara (Signed) [Report This]
    Well, I guess Ginny is OK but I can't believe Harry can just let this go and not resent her decision.

    It's ironic that she needs to feel strong but thinks herself too weak to heal in her own. It's kinda stupid and maddening. Made me anxious and irritated.


    Oh. For a moment there I thought Snape was going to tell him why he obliviated those students. Though I guess he started to.

    You bring a lot of real life aspects to the story, which makes it more palpable and interesting. I think it ends up creating too much angst over minor plot points at times, though.

    It was an interesting chapter anyway. I hope you write more soon. Thank you! =]

    Author's Response:

    ”I think it ends up creating too much angst over minor plot points at times, though.”

     

    I believe that you have put your finger on a weakness of mine… There is no way of getting away from you observant readers :-) But I still appreciate your response as it teaches me what I should work on to get better.

     

    I am in fact an inexperienced author and I easily get critical and self-conscious when writing. For instance, it is easier for me to write in english, although it is a foreign language, because in my own language I would be so conscious of my shortcomings, so aware of my imperfections that I would simply stop writing. In english, I just don’t realise my mistakes to the same extent :-) 

    In order to overcome that to one’s creativity so devastating self-consciousness, I also had to adopt this style of writing that I think you have observed and that disturbs you a little, and that is that I need to exaggerate a bit, bordering on the melodramatic at times - I’m aware of that. I think that I am afraid of sounding pathetic on the one hand and of being dull and boring on the other hand and my style of writing is an attempt to get away from those fears. Maybe when I have gained more self-confidence as a writer, I might be able to let go of that crutch and simply write with that convincing, solid seriousness that I admire in some authors.

    The important thing when you want to become a writer is not to quit, and to learn how to construct a story and to finish it! I assure you that to complete a story is an accomplishment in itself. And my hope is that I at least can offer a reasonably well constructed story, including some reflexions on ethical issues of magical and real life that I find interesting and also, now and then, can give you at least short glimpses of truely emotional scenes. 

    So, please don’t let that exaggerated angst irritate you too much, tell yourself that it is only the struggle of a debutante writer :-)


Title: Chapter 33 Angst, Oblivion and Regrets 02 Jul 2015 8:14 pm
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    I kind of like the idea that Snape is known as Healer Snape in the emergency room. It seems a far cry from Death Eater. Ginny hasn't dealt well with her emotion so far so her decision to be obliviated isn't a big surprise. I'm curious to find out if there will be any side effects.

    Author's Response:

    I like ”Healer Snape” as well :-)

    For the side effects, you know me by now - be patient, they will be addressed, at least to some extent, in a few chapters from now…


Title: Chapter 33 Angst, Oblivion and Regrets 02 Jul 2015 2:29 pm
Reviewer: BlueWater5 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Beautiful tie-in of so many themes.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you! It does go back to the discussion about Obliviating in chapter 9 On the Ethics of Magic - Obliviating, and we also get to know a little bit more about Snape and Lily, and about Harry and Ginny.


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