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Reviews For Spiral of Trust
Author's Response: Thank you! A sequel is actually on its way and a short piece of writing which is connected to this story is up now, if you wish to read it (In the wake of Occlumency).
I was looking for a sequel, but I didn't find it :(, maybe I don't know where to look for. I really like the flow of the story, I didn't want to be finished. Maybe, if you'll have time, maybe you'll consider to write a sequel. Thank you very much for your story. Author's Response: I'm really happy that you liked the story! I took a break from writing, but now I'm back and am currently writing on the sequel to Spiral of Trust. There is a short piece connected to the story, "In the wake of Occlumency", which is up right now, if you wish to read. Thank you for reviewing!
I like that you incorporated difficult ethical questions about the use of magic (such as Obliviation) not only in a theoretical way, but in a very practical dilemma: when Ginny chose to "forget" the traumatic events in Paris (having experienced amnesia myself, that makes me shudder), she left Harry to deal with the emotional repercussions alone. And because of that I don't see their relationship surviving in the long run. As a lesbian I also really love that you included homosexuality and homophobia in this story. It doesn't have to be a major issue to satisfy me, but too often homosexuality is completely invisible/nonexistent/ignored in stories in which the main characters are in heterosexual relationships. I also appreciate that you didn't include any sex scenes (because I am not a fan of the Harry/Ginny-Pairing, even if it *is* canon). Last but not least I like that you resisted the temptation to have everyone paired up at the end of the story and that Snape and Audrey Steadfast stay friends only. I also love your portrayal of Snape and the changing and evolving relationship with Harry. Snape stays very much the harsh and anti-social character that we have come to know in the books, but despite that Harry is now able to correctly read the subtle changes in his behavior. And really brilliantly done is the revelation about Snape's deeper motives for his sometimes incomprehensible wishes in the last chapter which reveals that the help provided throughout the story was very much reciprocal. The only point of criticism that I have is the sometimes disrupted flow of the story (like in chapter 30 where you detailed the holiday in Paris without it having a bearing to the rest of the story, as yourself acknowledge in your Chapter End Notes). If you ever write a sequel... I really hope that Harry decides on a career in Healing; that he finds someone better suited to him than Ginny; that Ginny finds her own peace of mind in regards to the traumatic events in her life; that Snape stays single but finds other ways of personal fulfillment and meaning in life. And then there still is the son of Voldemort... Author's Response: I’m so glad that you liked it! LGBT rights issues are important to me and I was happy to be able to include homosexuality in a small way in the story. I have a draft for a sequel, but I don’t know yet when I’ll find the time for actually writing it… Long stories like this one is a huge commitment and I don’t post until I know that I have a whole story. I hope to hear from you again in the future though - I appreciate reviewers who give detailed comments and who know what they like and don’t like :-)
I hope you'll write a sequel or at least give us some glimpse about their future lives... I hope Harry goes into healing; and is there perhaps some potential for a Snape and Mrs Stadfast to become closer...? I am not so sure how well Ginny and Harry will work out, though. You see, I'm very curious to see how the story continues...
Author's Response: Thank you. I take it as a compliment that I was able to provide a story that captured you. I believe that when I started writing this fic I longed for a continuation of the HP story and at the same time I, too, was looking for some kind of closure.
I see what you mean about the parts where I sum up the plot lines from canon, and I think that you’re right, particularly when posting in this kind of forum. When I wrote the story to start with, I had never entered a fanfic site before, but now it is obvious that in the context of Potions and Snitches at least, everyone is quite familiar with canon and such resumés are superfluous. I think I used it when writing to make things clear to myself, but I did not think of editing it when proofreading. |
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